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Recovery


Facing untold sorrow,
I strike with a soul
forged in fires of love,
tempered by the waters of peace.

You have forged a love so sweet,
built upon lies and cunning.
Shards of past memories
crack beneath my feet,
ground into forgetfulness.

I hesitate at the precipice,
questioning my motives.
Bravely I forge on,
stepping into a world new born.
And, I await new love;
for that is all that endures.





©2007 rous
10/23/07

Author notes

Written during a lull at work. My feelings on moving on from an abusive situation (not a current situation for me, but I have watched sisters and friends struggle through this).

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  • Jim Berkheiser
    November 18, 2007

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    Pleasant write

    I would suggest a title change, "First Step". The piece seems to be about what happened before "stepping into a world new born". Recovery would come next.


    Jim


    • Elrenia
      November 19, 2007
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      Thank you for taking the time and effort to read and comment. I chose "Recovery" because this is the tentative step taken when recovering from an abusive relationship. I know, no indication of that, but I will note it in my notes. I do appreciate the input.

      rous


  • Cat gold member
    November 9, 2007
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    it is..


    this is very nice-

    m


    • Elrenia
      November 9, 2007
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      Thank you. Not sure how you got here, but you are very welcome. I appreciate the reading and the commenting.

      rous

      • Cat gold member
        November 9, 2007
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        i saw the adorable kitty up in the forum.. and had to follow him out..


        • Elrenia
          November 9, 2007
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          He is irresistible, is he not? I should add a caption; but then, why? He pretty well sums it up.

          • Cat gold member
            November 9, 2007
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            is he yours?

            and yes, irresistible.. he drew me in like a fish on bait...


            • Elrenia
              November 9, 2007
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              Nope. I honestly think it was used in another contest, but I really liked it as cats are preferable to kids (which I have only four of, but about ten cats; the balance is almost perfect).


  • Nam
    October 24, 2007

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    "And, I await mew love;
    fro that is all that endures."

    First line: "mew" do you mean "new"?
    Second line: "fro" do you mean "from"?

    Other than that: a nice poem that you have written here.


    • Elrenia
      October 24, 2007
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      Okay, I can only plead lack of light and in a hurry to get to work. Mew was new, and fro was supposed to be for. Thank you for pointing it out.

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