I remember the night
spent with my Turkish delight,
Fireworks were playing
in overwhelming light,
Craving for sweetness
in sweeter sensation,
Your amorous delights
grow my temptation
always to act
with your provocation
of appetite craving kiss
in delight,
my king and sweet sultan,
ruler of my fragrant night,
soaked in sweetness,
ambrosia's nectar to swell in pleasure,
offering whisper
in savory treasure,
mermaid calls
to find in rapture,
temptress arousing
with other senses,
in art to weave
the subject under,
a dulcet of roses,
to spill in a moisture garden,
seeking to embrace
her Sultan and his might.
Author notes
Dear Kaibab helped me on this one. the first I posted was my near eastern descriptive feelings and words, and this one edited his way.
Thanks Rich
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Ahhhh Turkish delight. sounds like much pleasure, joy and sensual ecstasy.
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Thank you my dear for reading and commenting
Yes my friend you have no idea
so much passion, ecstasy and such divine delight with the Turkish Delight. Ouuuuf, Sweating
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thanks for sharing this. This is real good. I liked your imagery. I also found the background a little difficult to read through.
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This was well written, very good job.
"with your provocation
of appetite craving kiss
in delight,
my king and sweet sultan,
ruler of my fragrant night,"
and
"ambrosia's nectar to swell in pleasure,
offering whisper
in savory treasure,"
Were really good lines...After the contest, I think I'm going to ry to read the first one
Thanks for entering, and good luck
Brandon -
EXCELLENT
This GLOWS with love.
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This is quite good, very well written, awesome job writing this =)
Thanks heaps for entering and good luck! =) -
I remember your previous version and I must admit that previous was very nice but this one is brilliant.
~Sonja~
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I didn't help much this is all you and beautiful it is...
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A very nice romantic write indeed, my friend. I like it just the way it is. The imagery was great. I can relate quite well to this one.
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