I never know what to do
I don't know what to say
Despite my revelations
Its always been that way
Chasing drugs to break free
From this earthly gateway
Searching for rural water
Searching for my life today
I'm more then a manequin
Who's just thoughtful and tired
Finding desperate friendships
That always end up mired
Its hard to stand up a a man
Who's completely unwired
From society- its novelty
Who I hope to say is hired
I think its somewhat natural
To hinge on other's thought
But you self-reflecting realize
Your ego has been bought
I hope it isn't too poetic
Or maybe more then not
To assume we all cry tears of joy
When emotions become too hot
My trouble is I find release
From all the crowds like these
Sitting alone in the breeze
Searching for my inner peace
A contest entry
- Prompt by 2lullabyhaven.
450 points, ended November 13, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - make me feel by weebabycole.
360 points, ended October 29, 2007, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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A great piece, I loved the last verse, great! Best of luck in the contest Great show of emotion.
Best wishes to you
Tory -
can feel so much emotion GREAT!!
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interesting thoughts here. liked this part :I hope it isn't too poetic
Or maybe more then not
To assume we all cry tears of joy
When emotions become too hot
i think i feel ya here. cool
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this is beautiful. Jesuschrist. Can you stop one-upping me please?
I really like this.
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A unique spin, finding relief, novel concept. Thanks for your entry into my contest lol
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Good write, I liked how you wrote this. This seemed like quite an honest piece. Good luck in the contest. This seemed a little sad.
Thanks for your comment, glad you liked the poem
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