For you, for us,
I made this choice because I love you.
to save you
I can no longer be the one
To hold you when the rain comes
A salty drizzle upon our faces
Wrapped in my warmth, your safe,
While pieces of me fall away
Carried off by ocean waves
For you, your happiness
The salt was shaken for you
Cries that weren't heard, by you
I broke it...
trust
heart
love
faith
Your heart, the heart I patched with
duct-tape
I let it fall and shatter
Your back turned
The clench in my chest brought me to
my knees
My scream held silent
You walked away, but your eyes remained
Honey-brown ingrained upon my soul
cold and questioning
As I beg for your smile
your light
My heart lurches; seams are broken
Do I choose love?
or love?
Was I wrong?
Author notes
This comes from a very personal experience I am currently going through. I just had to write some things out.
F~E
A contest entry
- Emotion Sickness: Lost in the Currents by PerfectImperfection.
600 points, ended November 4, 2007, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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It's amazing!
Wow i have to say that this gave off pain in waves of raw emotion. Very rarely do i get to hear poetry that comes straight from the soul in such an unbrideled way. Way to go girl. -
As I beg for your smile
your light
My heart lurches; seams are broken
Do I choose love?
or love?
Was I wrong?
This is what the mystery of life is ..when you love ..you are in tears..what a contradiction you have portrayed and made me to think about the blessings which is called love..a great write is here.... -
Congrats on the honorable mention... I actually found this a bit... well.. very 13 actually. But it seems it's what the judge wanted so, good job.
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Not bad. I thought the "patching up with band aids" was a little cliché. Maybe you could do something more romantic such as "healing your wounds?" Congrats on the trophy.
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It's like scream that's been bottled up for too long. A fresh breath of air, painful at first, but it wanes on to find comfort. Choices define what our hearts are made of and I'm glad you relinquish your sincerity into making them.
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This is so much of what I wanted. Very well written, deep, powerful, expressive, and even beautiful in all its pained sadness. Thank you so much for entering & Best wishes in the contest!
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