A young man falters
Fells into a love
These waters never tested before
Churning inside a well
He forgot the world outside.
This well is a lovely thing to be in
It lets you drown as nothing else
Sweet dreams are real here
Which no fairy tale can narrate.
Moments pass unaware
In each others bosom
When a love blossoms
The fantasy breaks the limits.
Love is exploration of hearts
That all are led into
The sweetest parts of life’s journey
Where timid breaks up into courage.
The tenses are untouched
Time never runs with clock
Clasping each others arms
A nectar like sweetener fill the senses.
Author notes
option1, Love sublimates everything, like sweet clouds forming out of salt sea
A contest entry
- TONS OF OPTIONS/prewrites/whatever..... by landmark.
450 points, ended November 4, 2007, 36 entries
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WOW!
This is a beautiful poem! You've captured the emotion of love so well. The poem has a very nice flow to it. I love this part:
Love is exploration of hearts
That all are led into
The sweetest parts of life’s journey
Where timid breaks up into courage.
Very good read! Thank you for sharing!
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This is a beautiful poem... I'm surprised it hasn't placed... wonderful imagery, nice use of language without being overly wordy, and sweet sentiment expressed throughout
Keep writing
Polly -
i enjoyed reading this poem
and my favorite part is :
This well is a lovely thing to be in
It lets you drown as nothing else
Sweet dreams are real here
Which no fairy tale can narrate
it is described very well and the flow on this poem is very good. -
i've never been in love, but it sounds wonderful
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Nice poem, thanks for entering in the contest. All the best
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Very well written. I enjoyed all of this and thank you for entering into my contest. I think this is the most interesting part for me:
Love is exploration of hearts
That all are led into
The sweetest parts of life’s journey
Where timid breaks up into courage.
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This is absolutely beautiful. You have captured the essense of love so purely. I love the imagery you have used here and it was such a pleausre to read. well done, this is brilliant.
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