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Maybe.. just a teardrop would ease
(I think I forgot)
How do you fall away from hopelessness?
But the wind brings such wild fancies
And the rain pours down so hard..

I wrung out my hands to see if maybe..
but it ended up wrapped around another one,
And my feelings are like the empty bottles
Lined up and worthless around you..

And I was so close..
So close to falling asleep without thinking of you.

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  • sense surreal gold member
    September 3, 2008
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    yes it's the ambiguity on your emotions...created this beautiful piece

    thoughts and emotions overlapping...twisting together

    but it's nice how you end it

    And I was so close..
    So close to falling asleep without thinking of you.

    ang hirap matulog pag ganyan...

    Anna Lee

  • Virgoan
    October 24, 2007

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    The ambiguity of this piece stays in the reader's mind. I love the way you ended this piece.

    Good job kabayan


  • PerfectImperfection
    October 23, 2007

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    Damn. I like this. Very deep, but yet vague at the same time. Well written lines to provoke! Thank you so much for your entry & Best wishes in the contest!