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Casualty

The aisles call:

    come, be a
    paperback
    renegade ;

Sell your soul
to new nylon-
bound, fabric-
chased covers

and the type-
print of quality

            bores.

Author notes

[Rosenthal - 6/03]
Written June 4th, 2003

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  • Laurili
    November 30, 2003
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    i love the 'theme' words used to keep this so cohesive and tight (even in it's breavity i wanted to note the playful back and forth sort of rythem you kept with the language... nice!)
    and this is quite rehreshing!

    much respect.
    l-.


  • Ashriel
    October 20, 2003
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    You guessed that how...? Ooh, I should hate this transparency! lol


  • October 16, 2003
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    paperback-witer? -Beatles

    i suppose my sense is that smug is vapid as sarcasm is angry. but the options may be empty as well. hope you find a niche that you will enjoy (and you will, i know!)

  • Incandescent
    October 12, 2003
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    charming

    This made me smile. I like the sense of humour here, it brushes lightly. I won't debase it by calling it 'cute' though. The short, choppy lines seem to mean something, but I'll have to think about what it can represent. Ideas are nicely condensed here.