for weeks
I held you in my hollows
something so tangible
but just below my hands
you grew within me
and one day you would be more
than a promise.
but now you're not within me
and I feel as though
all of my seams have loosened
and everything I love is gone.
♥
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if you couldn't guess, it's about a miscarriage. but i did not have this said miscarriage, i just know of someone who did and i can't imagine how i would feel.
Please tell me what you think
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This was wonderful, i can't even imagine what that must've been like. I am so grateful my pregnancies went so well. I don't know what i would've done if i had lost either of my kids.
Great write,and i am sorry for your friends loss.
i wish her and the late child's father well and i hope they pull through this loss.
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G'day bloodislikewine
Wow. For someone who has never endured a misscarriage you wrote this well.
Sadly I have gone through several, the worst when I was 7 months and my son died in my arms.
Amazing write.
Stay safe
~Amanda
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"I held you in my hollows."
This is interesting. I like the alliteration and the imagery behind it.
"something so tangible"
this reminds me of a taking back sunday song. I'm not sure which one, but it does. Probably the weakest line the piece if I had to choose one.
"but just below my hands
you grew within me"
I really like that. I can't explain it, it's just weird. It's unsettling. I like it.
The next stanza is just pure gold. I can't imagine what a miscarriage might be like, but this seems like it might be a pretty accurate description. It's eerie. Nice write.
-mandy -
i like the empty space around the poem it adds to the message of the write. thank you for sharing and best wishes to your friend.
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Oh my god. This gave me cold chills. It is so sad for someone to have to go through a thing like this. I am so sorry for all those who go through this on a daily basis. It must be one of the hardest things in the world to deal with.
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