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Tortured Soul

Dead, accusing eyes stare back
reflections in jagged shards of broken glass
Crimson trails mar a pale face
From bloody tears cried out in pain
Wave goodbye to bleeding dreams
The light's gone out, she no longer screams

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  • HippieMinded
    October 25, 2007

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    That is good.
    The last two lines realy go well with each other.
    "Wave goodbye to bleeding dreames
    The light's gone out, she no longer screems"
    Sends shivers up my back.

    Good luck in the contest.

  • ItsRainingAgain
    October 23, 2007

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    It is different than anything i've read. I like it. it is very well written.