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As you look down on me

As you look down on me

you may see

struggle and pain

you may see me fighting

for what's right

and denying whats wrong

it must be hard to know

i am here and you are there

we can't talk

and even if we did,

people would think I'm crazy

if you saw me you would see dissappointment

you may look down on me

and see everything has changed

I'm not the little girl you thought I was

and that I do things I can't even belive I do

you may see someone who's lost and confused

yet knows exactly where she is

you'll be my angel

you'll watch over me

and potect me and make sure I'm safe

you'll help me in keeping my religion

for years to come


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  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    April 21, 2008

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    I think you put your whole heart into this piece,
    and for that I think it is pretty good. I think it has a personal feel to it.
    Just remember that life is really what you make it out to be. And if things are going wrong for you, change them. Be strong and fight for a better life.

    Loveandblessings2u & yours always
    Joyce

    good luck in my contest.


  • Artemis Gem
    November 11, 2007

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    ...?

    Hello, background contest?

    I like your piece, very good. But this is a background contest, so it doesn't fit the criteria. Please read the rules.

    much luff,

    pegleg

  • kitkat92
    November 9, 2007
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    alright, alright

    a lil wierd an confusing, but its good all the same, thanx for enetering

  • star wars fanatic
    November 9, 2007

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    Nice poem, but it was just that, NOT a quote, Please read some of the entries, see what I'm looking for, and enter a new piece. Thx


  • walkingstick98
    November 6, 2007

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    who are you talking to in this? I loved the piece that you entered here just not really sure to whom you are talking. Other than that great job and good luck


  • Prison of Lyme
    November 6, 2007

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    I LIKE THAT!

    I FEEL LIKE THAT A LOT. I SUFFER FROM BI-POLAR AND ANXIETY W/ AGORAPHOBIA AND IT IS HARD JUST TO GET UP SOMETIMES. IT IS GOOD TO HAVE POSITIVE SUPPORTS IN YOUR LIFE.
    TAKE CARE,
    MS MELANIE


    • Best of Serendipity
      November 9, 2007
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      thanks for the lovely comment im glad to hear that ... so whats your name ne ways .. my name is samantha


  • luna-midnight gold member
    November 5, 2007
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    this is very homey, and nice!
    it goes nicely together and turns into a nice poem, but i'm sorry nothing stuck out to me. but this is a wonderful entry!
    thanks for your entry and good luck
    stephanie =]


  • Ephiphany
    October 28, 2007

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    Indeed this hits HOME

    I loved how you wrote this, brings back some memories that I use to move forward, instead of letting them be a hinder. Excellent, thanks for sharing with me.

    ephiphany


  • Moodayo-Okohke silver member
    October 24, 2007
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    As you look down on me...see everything has changed...I'm not the little girl you thought I was...This is very tender my little one and filled the need to be loved for who you are!...It fills as though you have lost someone dear to you. Yet you know they are always with you...Very Good!


  • Touchof1der silver member
    October 23, 2007

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    Welcome to Allpoetry!

    Writing is such a wonderful form of expression and a great outlet for the things we all hold inside. I am so glad you have chosen Allpoetry as the place to share your talent. I encourage you to wander around and become familiar with all the wonderful features we have here. There are also many writing groups and contests and even online classes that you can become a part of here at Allpoetry so welcome aboard and if you have any questions, don’t hesitate to contact any greeter online!
    ♥ Touchof1der

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