yesterday
echoes in perpetuity;
perplexed sighs
resound in slumbered
hush; insignificant
and hollow
she wakes;
she cries more
often these days;
tethered screams
in a paper cup,
discarded dreams
on feather pillows
the sour taste
signifies too much...
A contest entry
- The Cloudy Side of Dreams by Zayra Yves.
1500 points, ended October 28, 2007, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is just amazing. Totally stunning. Congrats on the HM.
Chelsea
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That second stanza is a real killer! Just stunning!
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Each time I read this I could almost hear the Beatles singing "yesterday all my troubles seemed so far away"Indeed yesterday echoes in perpetuity could be sung to the same tune, I especially liked the inclusion of soured taste as opposed to bitterness biting,the poetess paints poignantly,kudos.
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just a huge sigh babe,such a great write that resonates with my soul..
love to you xxx
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did i mention there is a really nice rhythm to this?
seems to capture the monotony that brings this dis-ease
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i'd put and before hollow..same line, just a small thing, and probably more a personal preference.
i understand this one, though.
woke up at 2 am like this.
wondered if it was worth going back to sleep..
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thanks
yes yes
still tinkering
golly you were quick lol
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i have a bad habit of reading when it says on 'right now'
i should give them a few minutes hehe.
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