A woman lies in the streets.
Her eyes are vacant and pleading.
No one seems to care what she needs.
No one can see that she's bleeding.
She's just another Jane Doe in this city filled with lost souls.
She's just another gutter child living in this concrete wild.
Started when she was twelve years old.
Being bought, being sold.
She thought that it would be so easy.
Dressed like a woman, but eyes like a baby.
She's just another Jane Doe drowning in this world of lost souls.
And then she met the pusher man, king of this concrete wasteland.
She was just trying to escape all the heartache.
She was just trying to survive.
She was just trying to stay alive.
But she's just another Jane Doe in this city filled with lost souls.
Doin whatever she can to escpe this withering wasteland.
She said, "This wasn't how it's supposed to be.
I just wanted to be happy.
I remember when my life was in front of me,
And i remember when someone loved me."
"And I just wasn't a Jane Doe dying in this world of lost souls.
I had my whole world in my hand and i cast it to this glittering dreamland."
"But now I'm just another Jane Doe, with no dreams no hopes of my own.
Try and save me if you can from my life, my coffin, my wasteland."
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A slice of American life woven with the victims in mind. This sounds like a tribute to me, personally.
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I really liked the meaning of this poem, but not necessarily the repetition of the "jane doe...lost souls." I liked most of the rhyming but the overall rhyme scheme threw me off a little. It was still very good, though
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