Hot, ignited, surplus of love
you, my pet, are who I'm speaking of
encaged in your reclusive den
all bets are off and I am in
You tend to me with sparkling gloves
you say I'm the greatest of your loves
I'm interlaced with thoughts of you
I'm changed, and yes also subdued
My eyes hone in and lock on yours
I follow the path to your front doors
so convinced I am of who you are
I ran and jumped into your car!
A contest entry
- 15 lines or less... by xTomorrowx.
450 points, ended October 26, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wow...you've got me on this one!!! I liked your teasing tone and infectious humor...oh it's nice to have a good laugh with such a nice poem!!!
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Thank you, it was a lot of fun to write hahaha
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Hehe, awesome write! I like this one, we always need to hear an upbeat poem like this every now and then, brightens our day =)
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Thanks, yes sometimes these types work, I suppose
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lol...I bet you say that to all the boys.lol...a good passionate piece.
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This is one of my sillier poems, which make up the bulk of my stash hahhaahahaha and I only say this to the cute ones hahaha Thanks, Iggy for your funny reviewlol
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