my heart was within your grasp
and you clung tightly to it
promising to never let it go
never to crush or break it
then she came into the picture
not giving you her heart
but giving you her body
and for her you tore me apart
you crushed my heart between your fingers
the blood running down your arm
but you didn't bother to clean it up
you left to me the mess and harm
i vowed at that point in time
to never lend my heart out to men
never let someone hold it so closely
no one will ever hold my heart again
A contest entry
- No-one will ever hold my heart again. by Poetryintheblood.
450 points, ended October 24, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Kiss This Thing Goodbye (And Bury the Past) by trista.
450 points, ended November 21, 2007, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I find it so sad that one person is capable of doing so, so much damage to another human being that it affects them forever.
On a happier note though, I've found for myself anyway, that falling in love again is the best cure for heartbreak. It might take a while, but when the truly right one comes along, somehow it all seems worth it again. 
Your poem has a good structure and the flow is not bad throughout, just a couple of spots that tripped me up a tad bit. I would have liked to see a different rhyme in stanza 1, instead of rhyming the same word with itself, also a capitol "I" in L1 of your last stanza, but you've done a nice job here and much of that is personal preference.
Thank you so much for your heartfelt entry, and I hope you are able to bury this in the past, as in the name of the contest.
Good luck and best wishes,
~J.
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Very descriptive, and i am so sorry for the torture and pain you must have suffered. This poem has real emotion, and very raw emotion. Very good and thank you so much for entering, best of luck to you!
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Thank you for your heartfelt entry, Josephine
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wow this is a wonderful poem . it is sooo relatable 4 me. very nice piece here !
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Very interesting and beautiful poem my frined, good luck in soul searching's contest.
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