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I am the Lungfish.

How can I be here-?
When no bodies listening?
See my hands slowly fade away,
I see my scales, luminous, turn to glass.
I see the autumn leaves appear in patchwork through my feet
I see my chest give way to muscle.
Give way to ribs that are highways teaming with sick traffic.
Give way to lungs, which are a church of bells and whistles.
Give way to bronchiole nightmares in darkest grey.
Give way to space.
This exchange of gases is accomplished
I am the Lungfish.

Author notes

Option 5: A poem about my imaginary friend,
he should scare you too, he scares me.

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  • badnovocaine
    January 16

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    Haha I love the author notes!
    Amazing
    So bookmarked for later reads (I hope you don't mind)
    If ya do, tell me so!
    Love this


  • BermudaHighway
    November 13, 2007

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    "See my hands slowly fade away,
    I see my scales, luminous, turn to glass.
    I see the autumn leaves appear in patchwork through my feet"

    You are the master. I love this. I really really do.


  • lesbian-in-love
    November 12, 2007

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    Interesting in a good way. Lungfish. I thought that was catchy. It was indeed very entertaining no doubt about that. Thanks for entering and good luck.


  • karma-n-peace
    October 26, 2007
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    Definatley worth the read!
    Everthing about it is entertaining!

  • shriekingvioletta
    October 26, 2007

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    love it! everyone else who commented on your imagery was spot-on - it's perfect. i don't think there are any other words that would have worked that well together for what you were saying...


  • I will stand by you
    October 26, 2007
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    thus was a great write. Keep up the good work.


  • SignifyingNothing
    October 26, 2007

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    Wow, this is wonderfully weird. The Lungfish, huh? You have one unique imaginary friend, that's for sure. I enjoyed this.

  • AltruisticSociopath
    October 25, 2007

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    ???smile???

    There are some deliciously crazy lines in this piece that speak to me on a deep dark level. Lungs that are a church of bells and whistles? Wow. The last line also matches the silliness well.


  • Megan Awesome
    October 25, 2007

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    I don't really think I understand it lol. But that isn't unusual. Could you explaine it to me a little more?
    Megan


  • SquarestCheerio
    October 25, 2007
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    Forgot the smilies...lol

  • SquarestCheerio
    October 25, 2007

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    Your imagery is immaculate

    "Give way to ribs that are highways teaming with sick traffic"

    Brava.

    Lovely piece!

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