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Unattainable Sensibility

You're in my vision
My heart stutters
and soul grows glad

Strands of hair fall
Brush across your shoulder
Sending me into a dream land

Wanting to touch you
My strongest desires
Are to hold you close

Tears in your eyes
Wanting to help you
Unable to do so

You seek comfort in friends
I'd give anything
Just to be one of them

The time I cried
Your hand on my shoulder
Pulling away my troubles

Next to the sun
Sitting at dusk
Giving you a golden border

Friendship is the only option
To risk that would be fatal
Such a consequence is worth it

Author notes

Based on a friend of mine who I have a crush on...

I thought this was gonna be better in my mind than it is here but for some reason it didn't come out right

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  • Breathless Ballons
    June 10, 2008
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    great, i loved this.
    thanks for entering & good luck


  • a-Tragedy
    April 8, 2008

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    Very Beautiful, Excellent flow and imagery.
    You've done a great job on expressing you're true
    Feelings something many of us can never do.
    Well Done.
    Thanks for entering
    And good luck
    ♥Ashlee


  • N e a r
    February 16, 2008

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    I'm actually in love with my best friend, and yeah, it's hard to go through. Sometimes it works out and sometimes it doesn't. Hey, at least you are friends, right? And that's still a close relationship. It's just mostly the physical attraction is missing and the deeper level of feelings. This poem is very attractive and true to its owner's feelings. You've expressed yourself fully and gave a strong view on your emotions.
    ~

    Thanks for entering my Valentine's Day contest, and good luck!

    M a r l u x i a


  • only1love4ever
    January 30, 2008
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    Amazing and it is breathtaking and dreamy and sweet...It is very loving and incredibly a will to love and a need to lust, and a dream to have both, and more of a touch, and a kiss, and a hand, and an emotion, and a place to stand, someone to hold, one who will scold me every once in a while, this poem is a friendly reminder, of love, and to love without it!!