My wrists are bleeding,
My mind is screaming,
My hearts and empty hole,
To life there is no meaning,
No love, no god, no soul,
All I ever wanted was,
To hear you say those words,
I just wanted to love you,
But those things never were.
So I came home and grabbed the knife,
Out of the drawer,
I placed it to my wrists,
Like a thousand times before,
But this time I pushed to hard,
To deep,
The blood began to run & seep,
My body I will no longer keep,
My blood was like mud,
Oozing to the floor,
My time on Earth was ending,
As I reached for the door,
Now I sit here crying,
As I await my turn to die,
So with my blood I'll write on the floor,
"I love you and Goodbye,"
I love you....and I died.
Author notes
This is the second version of this poem i have written.
A contest entry
- Come on in you know you want to!!!!!!!! by lizwicker.
525 points, ended December 1, 2007, 43 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - what exactly have you won? by black lagoon x.
420 points, ended December 22, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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omg this is really good.
very powerful
ful of emotions.
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wow...
thats all i can truely say is wow!!
this was brilliant the rhyming was amazing, the emotion that you put into it was just breathtaking!
well written
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been there.seen it.felt it.but this,i loved.
Deep emotions don't come very often,and i appreiciate that you put a reflection of one in my contest.
Thank you for entering,good luck!
-Phoenix
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good
wow this was deep.
xxx
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:'( I feel your pain I know your pain I've been down that road before.
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GREAT!!!!
ABSOLUTELY FUKIN AMAZING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!, CAN U MARRY ME!!????..........THIS WAS AMAZING!!! YOU HAVE TO BE ONE OF THE BEST POETS ON ALLPOETRY!!!!, I LOOVE ALL YOUR POETRY!!!!
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AMAZING!
That's really deep , I love it! -
This is sad....and it doesn't help that I've just put on a relatively sad song...but, seriously though, it is sad & I like it a lot....kinda what happened to me & being in love.
Cheers,
Aden Recreated
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crazy
i love this so much
it's like an ode to love and death and no love
it's all just crazy
you are really good
i love the ending the most though -
i laughed (cough) not really (cough)
I cried
i hyperventilated
but mostly cried
it speaks 2 the soul on a very deep level
it's so deep that it's deeper than the shallowist pool.
I'm speechless....I own ur beautiful poetry!!!
well, actually u do
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i loved it i thougyt it was very emotional
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i really loved this poem i feel like that everyday and i do it too who knows when i will die i really dont care if i do but all i want any more is to here those three words from the one that broke my heart
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yoh
it's amazing
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