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Feel the Waves

So many here
what to choose is unclear
I like them all
I add them one by one
who is next to join in the fun

Creating my escape
letting go of the day
fill me to my core
repeat them all over again
I can't get enough

Drown my life away
take me to a better plane
make me move
make me sing
close my eyes
I dream away

My Twisted Transitor
more Tearjerker
are you Good Enough
don't be Thoughtless
let me Open Up

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  • Luminescence
    February 8, 2008

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    oh... wow this was good... I keep on reading the last stanza though... it really caught my eye.... because that could be the making of a really good line in a sound... Like really really good... one question though.... I know they are for a reason... why are some of the things capitalized?

    ~Lumin


  • zeroism
    February 7, 2008
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    nice!


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    February 3, 2008
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    My Twisted Transitor
    more Tearjerker
    are you Good Enough
    don't be Thoughtless
    let me Open Up

    Ah..what a beautiful game you are playing with your muse and involving us as well to witness the beauty of it..you are wonderful in thoughts and yes in poetry as well.I love this write..well done....


  • JoshuaScott
    February 1, 2008
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    This could have many meanings, not sure which one you ment but I like it, flows really well.