O treasur'd maiden,
aloft am I, affix'd~
within thy sensual smile.
Spellbound, I gaze upon
radiant beauty, adorn'd~
only in pearls to beguile.
Subdu'd moments in twilight,
whil'd away in silence~
descending.
Silhou'tt'd by Autumn moon;
myne very soul, encharm'd~
ascending.
I stand before thee, mystifi'd,
cradl'd in amorous embrace~
unrequit'd.
Under siege am I, desire kindl'd;
bedazzl'd by impassion'd dance~
ignit'd.
O enchant'd maiden, this night
hath me hypnotiz'd; I must confess.
Thou hast truly awaken'd dreams,
long since vanish'd; I cannot suppress.
Author notes
I entered this into an anonymous contest, so please don't use my user name if you are kind enough to comment. Thanks in advance. 
I love to write about the medieval era. This is yet another tale of a knight professing his undying love to the one he loves.
art credit: http://shimoda7.deviantart.com/art/Monique-50216664
A contest entry
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700 points, ended November 1, 2007, 75 entries
Honorable mention
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Honorable mention
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Comments
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beautiful write, love i!t
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This is beautiful and romantic. I really enjoyed the read. You have a lot of talent and it clearly shows here in this piece. I love midievil love stories and poems and writing. Good job here and thank you for entering my contest and sharing this piece. Good luck.
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That was very beautiful, elegant more so. I did yawn but I'm exhausted so I don't blame your poetry Thank you for entering.
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Your sweet comment on this made me smile.
Thank you for reading it. What you need is a good night's sleep.
Don
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Thou doth pen with a sharpened quill and a mighty wit, my friend. I love this piece, romantic and mesmerizing.
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Okay, I'm blushing.
I was glad to get it to rhyme. That's where I struggle.
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a medieval era feel to it before I got to you AN and I am glad I read right because It means that you did do a very good job at it welldone indeed x
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Whoo boy, you've got some great comments!
I'm going to have to read some more of yours to catch up. I love reading other poets. This one took me a while, because rhyme is where I struggle the most, but it worked out, so I'm proud of this one.
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Beautiful! I loved every line, and every word. I am a fan of Midieval no matter the form. Thanks for sharing this encharmed read.
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I like this one to I like how it lays on the page. HAs great flow and imagery to. Congratulations on the trophies
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Thank you!!
This was my second medieval poem. Olde English is something I have loved to read since I was in high school. Being so new to writing poetry, it was a challenge to write, but I loved writing this one. Normally, my rhyme doesn't work out.
Don
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This is truly an awesome poem The flow is excellent
imagery is very good also Well written and well done.
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Thanks again, Swan Song.
I have loved to read Olde English since I was a senior in high school. I am so new to writing it, though. This is my second romance piece in that genre. I am continually learning a little more about it as I read older poetry. Don
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I suppose it fits the contest, though not quite...
An interesting piece. Pretty. But the format was sort of awkward I think. That could just be me.
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You talk about beautiful flow. This is masterful. At least when you rhyme you do it well. Which is oh so important. You have this style that is very enchanting. Every line was perfect, what a lucky lady
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Thank you so much.
I'm so new to writing in Olde English, but it's very rewarding. I've always loved to read it, ever since I was a senior in high school, and took American Literature. I hope to write many more 6th century Knight poems. I enjoy looking through older works. There's a link to older poetry on this site, which is nice. One of these days, I want to write an English sonnet, or two. That would really be something. It's fun to learn as I go. I enjoy the challenge of learning something new. Don
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Silhouetted by Autumn moon;
my very soul, encharmed~
Thou hast truly awakened dreams,
long since vanished
How beautifully you have expressed yourself here...such delicacy , such grace.... and with your words, I found myself roaming in my own vanished dreams... see, how much I could relate to your work here... BEautiful ! Keep writing !
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Thank you so much.
Your comments on this are so nice to wake up to this morning. Knight70
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I like this a lot.... It is a refreshing change in pace ti read these poems. my favourite part was the last few lines:
Under siege am I, desire kindled;
bedazzled by impassioned dance~
ignited.
O enchanted maiden, this night
hath me hypnotized; I must confess.
Thou hast truly awakened dreams,
long since vanished; I cannot suppress.
Beautiful!!! He can whisk me away any day!
Hugz
Himler
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Thank you, Himler!
I enjoy writing these a lot. I love to read older works. My high school American Literature teacher first opened my eyes to this language. It just took me almost twenty years to start writing it. Don
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This is stunning!!!
I read with bated-breath:
"Silhouetted by Autumn moon;
my very soul, encharmed~"
The flow is so sweet--
nothing awkward or too complicated.
and I know how hard that
is to pull off-- writing
in this style...
I absolutely adore this!
Fantastic work!!!!!
~Pastel
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Thank you so much, Pastel.
It's been almost a year now since I wrote my first poem, so I'm really thrilled to get a comment like this on one of them. Rhyme is where I struggle most often, but this one worked out allright in rhyme. Free verse is definitely my comfort zone at the moment. My senior high school American Literature teacher first opened my eyes to Olde English. I didn't write it at all in high school, but I wrote a ton of essays for class on them. That was nineteen years ago now, so I'm really glad that I am getting back into reading older works. There is just something compelling about the period that I find hard to explain in words. I really love to read your Archaic romance pieces. It's very inspirational to this novice poet. Knight70
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oh... there is something about that use of language that makes it even more romantic...i liked the format you chose... i see why there are a few trophies adorning this poem.
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Thank you so much.
That makes me smile from ear to ear. Don
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I do love the old shakespearean language, I love to read it but I have never attempted to write it, for that takes a true talent. This was truly captivating in beauty and depth. I long to read more of the same, I hope this makes the podium many times for your contests
Karen
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Thank you so much, Karen.
I love to read Olde English pieces. My high school American Literature got me interested in reading them. I didn't try to write any until recently. This is my second one. I was happy that I was able to get it to rhyme. That's where I tend to struggle the most. Don
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Im not much usually in the knights tales but this one held my attention Thanks for sharing it with me. Enjoyed it
Best wishes
Tory
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Thank you so much, Tory.
That sure means a lot. Don
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a well crafted love poem. the emotive imagery of your metaphors and perfect-pitch rhyming, punctuated with some middle english vernacular, display an impressive poetic sensibility.
i hate guys like you
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Thank you!!!
This just made my day. I'm very new to writing medieval pieces, so I am thrilled beyond imagine to read such a kind review on this one.
Don
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Excellent
Powerful creation, so visual and intense. Best of luck in the contest.
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Thank you, penman.
I do love to write medieval poetry. I have only written a couple of them so far. Knight70
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Man this is a masterpiece also .I love it so much
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Thank you again.
I was just thrilled that I was able to get it to rhyme. That's where I usually struggle, but this came out pretty smoothly, without feeling forced. Free verse is my comfort zone usually, but I'm slowly learning to write in other genres. Don
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A wonderfully moving piece... it flows with such passion and desire... reading this piece is like having the hands of time turned back... to knights of old and their fair maidens... You really did a great job..
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Thank you so much.
I thank thee, Passionate Knight. Knight70
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I feel the pauses you give within this write work well to emphasis those passions that are sometimes to potent to voice. Or, too overwelming to be denied by
the object of desire. I really like the word choices that move the reader along through this proposal of life-long devotion. Beautiful, timeless voice.
Blue
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Thank you, Blue!
Your comments have always helped to inspire me to write from the heart, and really think about what I'm writing. I appreciate them so much. Don
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This is so wonderfully written. You do have a talent for this type of writing and do it so well. I hope y ou keep sending me the links to any new pieces that you write.
I cannot even choose a favorite line because I love the entire work.
Thank you for sharing.
Nor
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Thank you so much, Noreen.
I loved writing this piece. Rhyme is where I usually struggle, but this came out pretty smoothly. Don
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i could actually see the towering walls of a medevial castle and the fearless knight riding to see his hearts desire!! thank you for entering and good luck.
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Thank you so much, jcat.
I'm so glad that you enjoyed this piece, because I love to write medieval poetry from time to time. Knight70
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i love the style and the format of this piece...not to mention what it brings out....this is a VERY good piece...after reading it i was just absolutely amzaed by this....it's a WONDERFUL write and I hope to read more of your work as soon as I can
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Thank you so much.
I really am proud of this piece, because I was able to make it rhyme. I usually have so much trouble with that, but this one just came out so smoothly when I wrote it the other night. Sixteenth century England had poets crawling out of the woodwork, really. One of my personal favorite poets from that time period is Sir Walter Raleigh. The entire era is romantic, and I find myself utterly captivated by the language. When I was writing this, I was thinking about the movie Three Muskateers (the one with Kiefer Sutherland, Rebecca De Mornay, and Charlie Sheen), actually. My daughter, Constance, got her name from that movie. As a matter of fact, I'm watching it as we speak. Don
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Thank you so much.
I really am proud of this piece, because I was able to make it rhyme. I usually have so much trouble with that, but this one just came out so smoothly when I wrote it the other night. Sixteenth century England had poets crawling out of the woodwork, really. One of my personal favorite poets from that time period is Sir Walter Raleigh. The entire era is romantic, and I find myself utterly captivated by the language. When I was writing this, I was thinking about the movie Three Muskateers (the one with Kiefer Sutherland, Rebecca De Mornay, and Charlie Sheen), actually. My daughter, Constance, got her name from that movie. As a matter of fact, I'm watching it as we speak. Don
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Don
This is beautiful...this era is by far my favorite...and the way you write of it...leaves me breathless...It's amazing babe!! Such devotion...such love...such beatuy...and it has brilliant rhyme!!! Your amazing!! I can't get enough of your writes!!! **hugs tight** thank you for shareing...thank you!!!
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Thank you!
It's definitely my favorite era, too. In 16th century England, poets were crawling out of the woodwork. My favorite poet from that era is Sir Walter Raleigh. I read one of his English sonnet romance pieces this morning, and it just blew my mind. He wrote it over 500 years ago. I can't remember the title to it, but I've got the page on my favorites. I didn't started writing poetry until about ten months ago. I'm really thrilled with how far my writing has come in such a short time. It's funny, because most people who know me have no idea I write. They only see the cartoons I draw, and the jokes I write.
In the next year or two, I'll probably start posting some of my cartoons with my humor poems. I've drawn quite a few different sea cartoons in the past couple of years. None of my work is published......yet. I've been drawing cartoons since I was a kid. I have hundreds of my own cartoon characters, but just one medieval cartoon character. His name is Phil the Barber. He's the one barber in the sixteenth century that just isn't too popular with the locals. He has an axe, and he's dressed up like an executioner. He has the black hood and all. He has this bad habit of slipping up when customers ask him to "take just a little off the top." I always expect to see a basket of magazines at the barber shop. I've never gone to the barber, and found a bunch of severed heads in a basket. That's not exactly a cartoon you'd see in the Sunday paper. Most of my cartoons are G-Rated.
Ha. Ha. I really love to draw funny stuff. Sometimes, I draw farting snowmen. I drew the Little Red Floating Guppy this morning. That little fish is sure funny to look at. I've got a great white shark named Luke. I've got starfish, jellyfish, and even little worms on hooks. My son, Dante, is a cartoonist, too. He has his own hammerhead shark cartoon character.
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I love the language you have used with this write. The rhyme and rhythm are so smooth and the words unfold unforced and so sweetly expressive. So much love and longing in this write. I love it. Well done.
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Thank you so much.
This is one of my favorite pieces. I wrote it last night, and it just seemed to come together so smoothly. Sixteenth century English poets truly wrote poetry to inspire for centuries. It's definitely the most romantic era, in my humble opinion. I've always loved to read Olde English, so I'm really thrilled that I am finally writing it. One of my favorite sixteenth century poets is Sir Walter Raleigh. Don
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This is really a beautiful ballad with an Olde English quality that is really charming. You must have been a roving knight/troubadore in a previous lifetime, because this genre suits you to a tee, and seems to bring out wealth of flowing poetry from your pen on many splendors. Your rhyming is also very original, unforced, and natural in this wonderful poem. Best of luck in the contest with this exquisite piece.
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Thank you, David.
That might explain why I felt so at home when I visited Portsmouth, England at the age of 18. Ha Ha! Seriously, being in the Navy, I got exposed to many different cultures, but England was the one place that I felt oddly at home. I started out writing my first medieval piece for my brother and his wife, since they regularly attend medieval festivals. Everyone dresses the part. They even have live jousting matches. I've never been to a festival with them, but I think that I would have a blast.
I was reading a sixteenth century poem by Sir Walter Raleigh this morning, and I was just amazed as I read through it. Every word sounded so free-flowing to me. My American Literature teacher from high school introduced to me one of my most favorite pieces in the world, and that was A Midsummer Night's Dream. Don
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Wow, another good Midieval write, this one really has charm appeal lol
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Thank you so much.
I love to write about this era, that's for sure. I'm so glad you enjoyed this one. Knight70
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Amazed....This is a most pleasurable read..It captivates the mind allowing sensual thoughts to roam about...Very well done Sir..
Peace and best wishes with this entry
~A~
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This is very nice.Thank you for sharing this with me.Goodluck to you in the contest.Best wishes and much love
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Thank you, C.J.!
I'm so glad you enjoyed this. Knight70
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Filled with beautiful passion. I enjoyed this very much.
"Under siege am I, desire kindled;
Bedazzled by impassioned dance~"
Those two lines are excellent. Well done poet! Very well done. ~Pamela
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Thank you, Pamela!
I just re-wrote one line. I think it flows better, now that I put "spellbound" at the beginning of the line. I'm reading up on English sonnets. I'd love to write one in this genre. Knight70
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I like this poem a lot I especially like the phrase "Cradled in amorous embrace." You do very well with your selection of words and adjectives. Keep up the good work. Jeff
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Thank you so much, Jeff.
I just re-wrote the third stanza. I wanted to start that line with 'spellbound.' I am going to have a lot of fun writing medieval poetry from time to time. Don
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