today,
this morning
was so {beautiful and pure}
we pushed aside
the outside world
and delved into
ourselves for awhile
intertwined and caught up
with each other
[yes, it was so worth it]
oh baby
i hope you know
exactly how you make me feel
in our world
of blankets and sheets
and dreams
you and me
nothing else matters
it's so hard to awaken
laying here warm
with you
on this cold monday morning
[it's never felt so good]
my dreams
i don't remember
from the night
[and i don't care]
because when i wake up
next to you
it's so much better
than anything
i could imagine
i move into the circle
of your body
and breathe in
the purest air
[whycan'tthislastforever?
...cause it wouldn't be as great]
it's me and you
after all this time
and i can't help but believe
it was meant to be
[and this rhythm of me and you]
we are so connected
let me look at you
and take this in
[this moment will keep me going through the w e e k]
{godyouresogorgeous}
...i'm with you
can i find the words
that do you justice?
i'll keep this in my head
[cause no photograph would be nearly half as good]
these hours with you
flyby
and the days without you
t r a i l a l o n g
[that's relativity]
if this isn't perfect,
i don't know what is
{this is what matters}
right here,
this moment
that makes me want to
cry with overflowing uncontained elation
emotion
so tangible
this is what matters
[not this pointless meaningless worldly bullshit that brings everyone down]
these hours of
pure love
and contentment
and adoration and comfort
and exquisite radiance
and raw bliss
[and you're the only one who knows]
you bring it all together
and i'm not sure
if it would be possible
for me to be
any more **in love** with you
[and maybe this isn't eloquent but it's honest]
the way you move against me
the way your face
feels against my lips
[icouldkissyouforever]
you have changed my world
in so many ways
[yes, the red lights make me smile]
and we hold each other so tight
[so sublime]
nothing could come between us
[i do it all for you
i'd give it all for you]
Author notes
#2 - The wonderful feeling waking up next to someone you love
(for contest)
A contest entry
- 4:44 - a n y t h i n g by the chase.
900 points, ended October 26, 2007, 45 entries
Honorable mention
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Silver trophy winner
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Comments
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i really love this poem! I'm sorry this should've gotten gold!!!in my contest!!
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well thank you! ( have another contest! haha) :-)
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I love love love your poem.. by far one of the best ones i have read.. its beautiful.. thank you so much for shareing it and good luck in my contest!
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Congrats on the honorable mention trophy... this was a well written poem however I personally did not enjoy it because of the format you used and the style... it's really not my cup of tea. But the poem's message is lovely. Thanks for entering.
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This poem has lots of emotion!!
Good luck in the contest!!
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WOW!!!
this poem is so incredibly because it has incredible emotion and it's extremely creative. absolutely wonderful!! -
this is very good....very good...thanks for entering and good luck in the contest
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this was long and I generally get the jist of it. It was sweet and very sugary it had its moments of semi depth perception.Ok forget that to plainly put it it was good but it didnt really get me going but trust it was good so dont worry about that. Good luck and good write
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I love the word choice and overall tone of the poem. Not a big fan of dirrty pretty, but the poem itself was great!
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i like t good luck in the contest
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amazing
Nice.
I liked looking at it. The way its formatted makes it tons easier to follow.
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this was so gorgeous!
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thank you so much! i really enjoyed writing it :-)
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Wow. That was beautiful and true and it made me feel something.
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Oh wow. This was so sweet and loving.
It reminded me of some mornings when I've woken up next to certain people.
Amazing write.
~Restless and True~
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