Broken hearts
and
Tainted dreams.
Fading whispers
and
silent screams.
Mingled hatred
and
swallowed fears.
Steady pain
and
Blood-stained tears.
Empty words
and
stolen thoughts.
Traded lies
and
childish taunts.
Hidden lies
and
secrecy.
Your lies
end up
killin' me.
A contest entry
- Your Maverick Prewrites . . . by RatherImaginative.
925 points, ended October 16, 2008, 67 entries
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This piece has excellent rhythm and meter. Though some of the images are a bit cliché, they well describe the pain of betrayal. Thanks so much for entering my contest!
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ohh my god you know the truth to that i loved it keep writind
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good
i really like the way it flows , and the words are very powerful! well done!
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this is good
nice...it rhymes and has a regular rythm. sad. but maybe true.i really like it...you have a gift. -
Love it!
good, awesome, easy read. easily understood and greatly written. keep on posting.
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Impressive I love when a person can use rhymes efficiently without sounding cliche. A job well done.
-Addy -
excellent poem loved this line
Traded lies
and
childish taunts.
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