Walking through this mud so long
The day grows old, sun wears thin
Struggling to be what's not to be
Over my dim eye the darkness hung
Coiled branches reach out in desperation
Remains of life that fainted and sunk
They cut into my flesh as I pass
and attempt to pull me under
Faster my aching heart beats
Delving further into sickness
Can't slow my feet
The swamp gets thicker
Without a whisper it won't retreat
Over head crows chirp
Mocking me to "Suck it up"
Lying that it will get better
Rain clouds hover like daggers
threatening my death lest I dive for cover
I try to draw from some inner strength
Prove I won't be this way forever
A white dove approaches with misleading rays
Dropping pills on my tongue
It leaves me in dismay
I see others dancing in gowns flowing white
They float so gracefully
on the darkness in which I drown
Author notes
about my mental illness and how i struggle daily with depression, anxiety and moods, plus pills n docs. hoping i won't give in to the suicidal thoughts and attempt my own end like i did two years ago. it is a frightening thing to lose control over yourself. 5
A contest entry
- Send Me A Poem by crystallynnbradford.
400 points, ended November 9, 2007, 52 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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good poe, long, but good, good luck in the contest
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i like the last like darkness i which i drown bc i too drown in horrid darkness of depression
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Very creative.
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OMG this is so goo
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bravo
Potent, very potent stuff here, an excellent write. (I have a very close friend who is largely lost to everyone due to mental illness and a refusal to take meds) both poignant and potent. bravo... bravo... bravo...
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Great impression
It is very strong confession, neither a routine, nor a fashion :-)) Marek
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Wonderful!!
Rain clouds hover like daggers
threatening my death lest I dive for cover
Beautiful lines
Wow brilliant poetry. Wonderful job, great imagery!
Bravo Bravo Bravo
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loved it.. you are 1 of my faves. I'm in denial of myself and like it there -
I can relate all too well with this poem. This is me and how I feel. I'm not on anything because I'm stubborn and I don't want it to control my life. This is sad but I enjoyed reading it. Thank you for entering and good luck! I hope things get better for you
Leslie
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I too suffer depression and I think this is one of the best descriptions i have heard in a long while... I hope you find peace with it sometime
Karen
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The dungeons...
Over detailed to each word you say it´s sounds like being through in one of those circles in hell...
Brilliant I must say
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What option does this fall under?
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brillant...brillant and fucking brillant
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a good piece here about your depression, its important to always have the inner strength to stay positive, expression your emotions can sometimes really help. I hope thats things look bring in the immediate future for you.
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Extremely deep and pensive
I really like the cadence and words you use here, it reminds me... "they cut into my flesh as I pass" of cutting, but I like your explanation. Thank you for sharing your pain, and I hope you see complete healing...
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thank you for sharing this with all of us, and trusting us with this view into that side of you, may you always find the release in poetry that so many others do for their own trials and tribulations...
peace
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thank you
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such an important message here, such a tragic and widespread problem... good for you to write poetry from your perspective...PK
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thank you
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it is an amazing what statisic show where people are concerned on this site with depression and suicide. I am thankful that many are given the gift of processing their feelings through writing such as yours...you serve as a light for others...we will never see or understand how our own lives provide others with the light and knowledge they need in their time of darkness and need...thank you...peace and light be yours in every way all ways, Kendal
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thank you
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Good to write and get these feelings out, rather than kept pent up inside. Sentiments well expressed in these lines - easy to read and understand as well. You know what this is about and so are doing something about solving the problem. Good for you. Keep writing and expressing those thoughts.
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This is a great poem
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What wonderful metaphors my dear. Perfect and very descriptive. Of course you are such a great poet. I wish you luck in the contest's you entered and I hope you are well.
Despair
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Wow. This is brilliantly filled with honesty and imagery.
Don't give up, live is still worth living.
keep your chin up.
thank you for entering and good luck in the contest.
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thank you
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Brilliant poem
So full of truth and images
Great Job
Good luck in my contest
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thanx
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It seems so easy
for some-- living "floating so gracefully"
I can relate unfortunately.."on the darkness in which I drown"
A very heart felt write
so honest and raw
I am always moved.
Good luck in the contest!
~Pastel
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as always you are too kind my talented friend
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