Beneath the eyes of yesterday
imprisoned by the past,
slaves to all we should have been
the dies that life has cast.
Are we bound by all the strictures
by the walls that so confine,
or is there freedom to be found,
somewhere beyond our minds?
A contest entry
- PIF PICTURE PROMPT by penman.
525 points, ended October 23, 2007, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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a good write, i think that there is freedom behind the mind, we just have to take the right steps and reach its open expanse.
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Wonderful
Very well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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wow this is a wondeful take on the picture and is strongly penned i loved it
well done and best of luck
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your first two lines were very good. I think it got a bit confusing towards the end, almost like you changed thoughts. I also didn't understand the fourth line, but I could just be having a blonde moment. LOL Um, so I like the idea of this piece, and your flow and rhyme are good, it's just that the message is a tad confusing.
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you have several miss spellings but i like the poem. Paints a good image in my head
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