You left me desolate and numb,
every fiber of my being does yearn.
Your touch, your love, I need to feel,
unrequited desire still burns.
I don't get it, I don't understand,
you went whilst we were at our best.
You refused to return any of my calls,
part of me wonders if this is a test.
No letter, no note, no explanation,
why don't you want me near?
What did I do that was so wrong?
I am besotted inside with fear.
My heart is shattered, torn in two,
the sorrow and tears are no fun.
Dark shadows appear, this is no test,
you could have said why we are done.
Author notes
Never written a heart break poem before, hope it what you're looking for.
A contest entry
- PREWRITE CONTEST>>>>BREAK_UPS by PersuingHappyness.
400 points, ended November 2, 2007, 37 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Donna Likes lol
This is so great pink.... I told you you need to enter... I LOVE IT... I will do a booby prize just for you lol.... just because its just so damn good. I would make it one of the winners but I would get a lot of hate mail for all the people I DQ for not giving me a pre-write lol. But I really LOVED this.... its was awesome just awesome
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This is so eleagant. Graceful and heartfelt!
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I like it. It comes straight from the heart. keep up the great post.
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oohh--
interesting piece. But it's not your best [if I'm brutally honest]. Were you heartbroken at the time of writing this? maybe that's the reason..
anyways, I do love the vocabulary used. Words many people don't even know the definition of. haha.
well done. -
Life
Life & love at times can be so confusing... True love should bring very little in the way of pain
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This is so sad.
It's so hard to move
on without closure--
all the unanswered question
linger..it can be maddening
I love the honesty of the questions,
and ..well, I love the way you write!!!
Good luck!
~Pastel
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