Blue rays of sunshine try to break through my window
but the cracks on it are filled with bitter jealousy; to keep it from breaking
I wish it wasn't so had getting to the other side without breaking the window
but it's like someone locked my doors and glued my window shut
and even though it's easier, I refuse to let my window break.
at least not for a no-guarantee like you.
I see the rain run down my window, every time you pass by
but when I lay my hand on the glass; I feel the rain inside
I double check on you; you're holding an invisible person closely
and above you the sun is shining with clouds fading
is it just unfair, or some sort of disadvantage?
the crack on my window go deeper, grown longer reaching the top of the glass
I run out of jealousy, add in some angst and coloring it blue
you're almost at the corner, she appears to my eyes as she does to yours
she used to be just like me; stuck behind a glass window
I press on the glass a little harder, in hopes of catching you
the window breaks under all the pressure, my jealousy and angst weren't strong enough
but I was too late, my window was broken and you were gone
so I took the hand of the next by-passer and became invisible
in hopes of winning him over when someone else's window;
breaks.
Author notes
This is the 'heartbreak' cliché in my own way. It's actually sort of happening to me in a way. The main point though is that the window is the heart. hope this wasn't cliché ^^
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'but I was too late, my window was broken and you were gone
so I took the hand of the next by-passer and became invisible
in hopes of winning him over when someone else's window;
breaks.'
Beautifully phrased and worded.
Nicely penned
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"I wish it wasn't so had getting to the other side without breaking the window"
"had" I believe that you mean "hard".
I think you could tighten up the lines a bit, take away any filler words that aren't really needed. It would help on the flow, and verse of it all.
A nice poem that you have written here.
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