she dances perception across tired eyes
that squint promises bearing redemption
as forgotten muse breaks vision's door.
locked and snared with responsibility's
persistent tragedy, I approach her
rhythmic vibrations that beat words
into submission through porch-light shadows.
let's ride sensual stanzas searching for
collaboration as we grip adjectives
that dig deep into perfection's bliss.
she floats over fascination feeding
me inspiration that falls like holy water
as I implore wide-open sanctuary's
consolation to ease between extensions.
my darkness sinks into her attractions
descending deep with twisted precision
as she pushes back strong definition
absorbing the flood of my reflections.
we lay wandering futuristic scenes
as all jamming must surely have to end.
Author notes
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has anybody seen my muse?
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Whew~ This was amazing!!!
rolled right off the tounge.
Very discriptive
Well done.
Delila
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Poetry. Fucking poetry. Indeed.
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well penned.
Best wishes and good luck
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A very sharp end, and the poem itself has wonderful imagery and flow, all together very sexy as far a language goes. Definetly a wicked write.
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Hi Poet, It’s good to see you back and I’m glad to see you haven’t lost you touch.
I really like this subject, where would we be without our muse. Women are endlessly fascinating, but a Poetess with a free flowing mind is a real turn on.
I especially like,
“she floats over fascination feeding
me inspiration that falls like holy water
as I implore wide-open sanctuary's
consolation to ease between extensions.”
Thanks for posting this.
Regards, ~ Peter ~
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An enjoyable piece of poetry, to grip the adjectives, always a pleasure as she's floating over fascination, a good poem.
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thanks...again this one was heavily influenced by a mate of mine who knows how to make love to his poetry...and sometimes fuck it good too.lol
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Smiling as I happily gather up your wonderful poem... to whisk it away to Poetry Planet. Thank you!
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Remarkable, truly, and I wish I might feature this splendid poem on Poetry Planet. May I, please? Your writing is so smart and thoughtful.
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thank you kindly...I'd be honored
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Love this..it's like a sensual tango..is there any other kind? lol...love the title, too
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Powerful words ,like a lovers dance with the rhythm of a sensuous beat...My darkness sinks into her attractions...descending deep with twisted precision as she pushes back strong definition absorbing the flood of my reflections...sighs...congrats on the silver but should have been gold
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I dig you...
let's ride sensual stanzas searching for
collaboration as we grip adjectives
that dig deep into perfection's bliss.
she floats over fascination feeding
me inspiration that falls like holy water
as I implore wide-open sanctuary's
consolation to ease between extensions.
Sigh...such grace and dignity...very sensual and alluring.
Becky
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Loved the entire work of poetry here but the fourth stanza leaped out at me. A very sensual writ indeed poet. Congratulations on winning the Silver Cup here. Very worthy work! Love the alliterations spent in this weaving.
Much Love & Respect ♥
Renee
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Beautifully Sensual Pen
Your pen never ceases to amaze me...The sensual flow sends radiant vibes from your words into my soul.The muse of this pen is luring with such enticement...enjoyed the
passions pull into that world of elegance...
Absolutely Beautiful Sweetie
~Cheryl~
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you make me want to write in the nude...
well, at least write in the nude more often...
great work here, Papi...love to you, Bella Flor
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thank you
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Superb
A metaphor well done my friend. This piece is strong and alluring, soft, sensual, and sexy. Yet it says so much more.
These are my favorite lines:
"she floats over fascination feeding
me inspiration that falls like holy water"
Just excellent. You have gone to new places with this piece. Well done. ~Pamela
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I like how you used the extended metaphor of poetry here. This was a beautiful write which I liked a lot. Good luck in the contest.
Thanks for your comment.
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This is such an excellent poem. This was captivating, full of passion and very powerful! I loved it!
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Wow... that left me breathless, what an absolutely beautifully written passionate write. You took my breathe away.
Bravo
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this really pulled me in. Wow! Awesome write. very magical.
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I thought you flared your title out expertly and as to the contest you slammed that too, good luck to you, lol
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love the first stanza....you like to beat things into submission, don't you?.lol a cool and sensual write. well done, friend.
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I love how you make the reading of a poem, perhaps writing, too, sensual, like making love to your reader in a poem...very beautiful, creative lines in this,
"I approach her
rhythmic vibrations that beat words
into submission through porch-light shadows."
Love that - excellent poem
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I like!
Admiring the "porch-light shadows" and "inspiration that falls like holy water," and "wide-open sanctuary's consolation." Your clone must be working as an English lit teacher in some college because you have a beautifully-working brain filled with impressive vocabulary and grammar know-how.
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