I danced on the moon
I danced on the stars
i even danced
on the sun
you wouldn't believe me
but I really did
it felt like putting
candy floss in your mouth
the sweet feeling dissolved
making me want maore
through my lonely tears
and my smile
which was cast away
I danced
just to show the world
nothing is impossible
I twirled the little streamers
creating little hearts and circles
then I wrote
P.S. I was here.
just to show the world
the biggest of things
begin with the smallest of hopes
Author notes
option 7~
option3~
dance~
A contest entry
- Make me feel dark and emotional. Lots of options!! by Kia Tenshi.
600 points, ended December 13, 2007, 20 entries
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Comments
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This wasn't exactly what I was looking for from this option... there wasn't quite enough imagery and I'm not a huge fan of free verse ... but thank you for entering.
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AWW! there you go again! man u have many messages in your wonderful poems you know... really! This was another amazing poem with a hidden message (not so hidden afterall )
This was so true! The biggest of things negin with the smallest of hopes mate... (first step to success is failure ) This is a fact! and i've experienced it matey! AWESOME!
When i read the last second line i was thinking of the times i wrote "ranji was here" or "orlando bloom was here" or "other crazy star was here" on everything i could get my hands on! IT was just crazy... and gosh!!! i pictured a girl dancing in the sun!!! That would be just an amazing sight! you'd beat the world record man!!!
Anyways... this poem was very true! not the part abt u dancing on the moon... but the message! wonderful poem!
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