Just one more breath
One more heart beat
One more tear
Just one more out stretched hand
One more chance for a friend
One more chance to loose my fear
Just one more chance at life
One more paper
One more pen
Just one more word
One more secret
One more second please
Just one more chance to tell the wind
One more cut that needs to be bleed
One more thing that needs to be said
Just one more day to be me
One more laugh
One more cry
Just one more chance to see the sky
One more caress of the rain
One more touch of the wind
Just one more tomorrow to dream of
One more time to fantasize
One more time to think about what to do with one more day
Just one thousand more of all this things
One thousand more smiles
One thousand more breaths and even a thousand more tears
Just one more chance to be me again
One more chance to face my fears
One more please just please
Author notes
hope you like it, i shure do
A contest entry
- WANTED- poets who are inspired by life and not a prompt by McRae by nature.
700 points, ended November 8, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This felt like a song. I like it if I think of it like that, but as for poetry, I think the repetition of one more makes it un-poetic and more lyrical. Thanks for the piece, it was very emotional and raw.
Carrie -
This is how everyone feels most of the time. Things are hard to deal with now but as you say in her you just need to take it one day at a time. Keep your head high and don't let people bring you down with their hateful words. Take this advise and put it to good use. I hope that this will help you to become a better writer and to help you in life as well.
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Things we all need to think of
The best wants , simple and easy to forfill, things we all should ponder on and over..Good write.
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Interesting. A little confusing/ misleading but I liked it I think. Good write.
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