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Big Mouth


"In God We Trust"


nestled in grime

and disregard

held hostage by

The United States of America


stares at mankind


unable to escape

from braille prison


not bearing bars


only lips


too large to climb over


and escape the eternal

circus ring

Author notes

photo courtesy of: Grunts Girl

don't you think the "In God We Trust" would jump up and run like hell off the quarter if it could just clear that little reeded lip on the edge?

or...I'm just a nut?

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  • Grunts Girl silver member
    October 22, 2007

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    I really liked the meat of this write...
    I took out sections that i thought were redundant... so to speak... meaning.. with the prompt the just were not needed since i had them in my head reading what remains... if that makes any sense?
    Thank you for your entry
    I really liked braille prison, circus ring, and the feel that held hostage gave...

    nestled in grime
    and disregard
    held hostage

    stares at mankind

    unable to escape
    from braille prison
    not bearing bars
    only lips
    too large to climb over
    and escape the eternal
    circus ring


  • Tam
    October 22, 2007
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    LOL

    Thank you beautiful butterfly...
    I'm not sure why...but the way the quarter is upside down, dirty and tattered it just hit me that those words..."In God We Trust" might wish to escape...but CAN'T...
    there is no exit from a perfect circle with a rim (lip) preventing words from climbing over the edge...
    a silver minted prison of braille is holding the words...hostage?
    Or....I'm a real nut and men in white suits will carry me away very soon...LOL!
    Thanks for the visit beautiful butterfly! Hope love and laughter find you today!
    Blessings! Tammy

    P.S. In God...I TRUST...as well...but not mankind...


  • SilverButterfly gold member
    October 22, 2007

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    I'm so amazed by you funny imagination Tammy. I don't know how you come up with these writes girl!!!! Where did this one come from?

    But...keep them coming

    In God, I trust

    SilveButterfly

  • Rowan gold member
    October 22, 2007

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    You're a nut~ but I love the way you think.
    A very fitting piece, well said, and done~


    • Tam
      October 22, 2007
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      Thank you!

      LOL!
      I'm convinced that "phrase" would love to clear the reeded edge of a lip and get off that silver minted prison if only....it could!
      But how do you escape from a circle? There is no beginning or ending point...
      errr....YEP...I'm a nut! LOL!!
      Hope butterflies and laughter find you today!
      Blessings! Tammy

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