Life...
We hold on to it
until we cant anymore
mainly because of two reasons
reason one:
our body wont let us
reason two:
life seems unbearable to us
either way we hold on
until we tell ourselves
"no more im done"
then its over
i swore to myself id hold on
forever to many things
life seems to be the hardest at times...
A contest entry
- Guaranteed Comments! by Nam.
425 points, ended October 23, 2007, 72 entries
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"I think if you added the apostrophe into the words they are designated for, that it would greatly improve the overall read of the poem. I understand why some do not use it but here I feel it'd be better for it, rather than not using it." I agree fully with what Nam said, in fact, I was about to say that myself, but he said it for me. Other than the grammatical errors, this is good. Thank you for entering.
Chelsea
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I think if you added the apostrophe into the words they are designated for, that it would greatly improve the overall read of the poem. I understand why some do not use it but here I feel it'd be better for it, rather than not using it.
A nice poem that you have written here.
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life is hard at times and holding on to it is one of the hardest things to do. it helps if others are there for support. Im glad to see that you're holding.
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