Music seizes my heart
Captivates my emotions
Relays my feelings through thought provoking lyrics
Music is an experience for my soul
An unknowing journey
A probing flight for my spirit
Music is my life
My personal outlet for expression
My way to reach those who don’t understand me
A way to reach my true self
Music is me
In a list
A contest entry
- "Between two saints - Hilda and Cecilia" by Vera Rich.
550 points, ended December 4, 2007, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Honorable Mentions and Bronze Award Poems Contest! ^^ by MJ Forgives.
900 points, ended September 11, 83 entries
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Wow your poem was pretty cool to read. It explains how I feel about music too. I hope you do well in my contest and thanks for you entry.
-Jess
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This short poem sums up the experience of music very well. I feel the same. Since I was saved at the age of 13, God poured songs into me...it was like hearing a radio playing in my head. Not so long ago a bird landed on a tree outside my window and began its song. The Spirit showed me that I was like that bird, created to sing to the Creator, whether or not anyone was listening! That was the heavy part for me! So now I just sing because that's how God made me. If no one else pays attention, it doesn't really matter. If you like music, and would like to give my latest songs a listen, go to www.nakedadam.net
I would love for you to comment on them as well.
Aloha, friend! I love the second to last line, for this is true for me as well: A way to reach my true self!
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amazing how music can send the message of our thoughts to others in ways just speaking won't allow us to do... and not only that but allows us to release our own feelings. i enjoyed reading this.
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Very nice indeed ...
and I really can't see much you could do to improve on this. I liked it all the way to the final line, which stopped me for a minute. It seemed a bit over blown, somehow, but after I reread the poem several times, it began to grow on me. Anyway, all in all, this is a fine poem.
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This is a very pleasant piece - spoiled only by the quite irrelevant comment in the Author's notes. Please have the courage to let your poems stand alone, without any apologia. My feeling is that if a poem needs explanations - it has failed.
Having had my usual grumble about that - I do like, particularly, the way you work with lines of varying lengths, - turn the page through 90 degrees, and it would look like a CRT transcription of sound. VERY Subtle.
PLEASE NOTE that the final placings will be announced in the course of the next few hours - and the "post-competition" critiquing period will open at midnight 3/4 December and continue for 72 hours. Competitors who make meaningful comments on other people's entries during that period will gain bonus points - provided of course that they have not commented on the said poems previously.
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Thank you for entering this competition. I have started opening entries an hour or so ahead of deadline, since I have bad bronchitis and can sit at my desk only in short spells. I shall judge the competition early next week - when I hope to be feeling much better - but in the meantime wanted at least to acknowledge the entry.
In the meantime, PLEASE read the rules again as regards presentation of the poem - and act accordingly
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Ahh Music~ Simply beautiful!
Light as a feather but leaves the sensation that of a butterfly~ I love it Serious....perhaps it's because I love music too....lol.Not that I pay any instrument or sing any.....hey sis, i really like it!
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Me Gusta. Mucho. I would say tho....DIG deeper into your emotions. Try to write something that's PAINFUL to write. THat makes you cry as you write it. That makes you feel like you wrote it in blood, ya know. Stop being safe!
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lyrical
your introspective verse refers to heart, thought, soul, spirit, communication, and understanding of true self, a wonderful achievement. This sings with life and I would be proud of it too. Keep writing.
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Very true!
That is very true, it seems music has the effect on most pepole taken us back to a place, time or just a silly thought. -
You should be proud of this, it was great. Music means a lot to most people. I know people who would pratically die if they didnt hear it at least once a day, lol. But i know what its like. I love music, but not to a great extent like most, but i still need to listen to it at least once a day, lol. Great write.
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Thank you for your lovely comment!
It means a lot!
Safely hidden in the darkness,
~ TRWLA
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