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Bête Noire

 

 

 

Odes to death

and the end of time.

Worlds have fallen,

steeped in crime.

 

The blackbird cries,

a haunted moan.

Angels have fallen,

encased in stone.

 

The gods are crushed

in the hearts of men.

Revenge is given,

it all starts again.

 

Three witches part

in a haunted moor.

And a dagger floats

towards a victim's door.

 

Fates are woven

by rheumatic hands.

Death and disorder

falls over the lands.

 

Laudanum highs and

dope induced dreams.

Voices are lost in

the word's violent screams.

 

A skeletal grip

on a skeleton key,

unlocks mortal hearts

in anxiety's sea.

 

Leaves fall from the

wishing tree's grip.

And gruesome words tumble

from the Grim Reaper's lip.

 

The stars are broken

and it all starts again.

The ugly truths held

in the hearts of men.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Bête Noire: something detestable that is generally avoided. Like the dark side of the human heart.

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  • VoltaicHypnosis gold member
    February 7, 2008

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    fascinating write! I like it, it has brilliant vocab and a wonderful packground, the form is a little - well its fine, but this poemn lacks a certain something that I can never put my finger on, but i think its my personal "wow factor"... this is still awesome, but automatically not a winner as it has a trophy. Please dont remove it though, it's a wonderful read


  • LadyDementia gold member
    February 4, 2008

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    Wow...a great piece..really! Best of luck in the contest with it


  • ShadedRequiem
    February 4, 2008

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    This is an Awesome poem. I love how dark and creepy it is, but in a beautiful way. I love poems like that and you did awesome with it. What does Bete Noire mean? I like the sound of it a lot. This is just an amazing poem. Awesome Alyssa


  • Celticmoon
    January 12, 2008

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    A very interesting piece you have penned. Your words are intriguing and draw the reader in with each passing line. Thank you for entering. Best of luck to you!


    Blessings
    Bel

  • piccola silver member
    December 15, 2007

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    congrats on the gold.
    "Laudanum highs and
    dope induced dreams.
    Voices are lost in
    the word's violent screams."

    I really liked these verses....I like rhyme a lot. Thank you for this entry.


  • LadyDementia gold member
    December 15, 2007
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    Chilling write, good luck in the contest!


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    December 8, 2007

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    Excellent!
    Love your wording and the mysterious air to this one
    Just tooo coool
    Wishing you the very best of luck in this contest!


  • SerenityNChains gold member
    November 20, 2007

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    Erie, creepy, dark, and wonderful! A fantastic Halloween poem, but still wonderful year round. I applaud thee!

    Blessed be,
    Billie Jean


  • Wolf Mistress silver member
    November 20, 2007

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    You really showed the dark side from humans...it was all very well described here in your write...I don't like this side of humans but I did enjoy reading your write

    XXJeannette


  • Breathing-Fate
    November 18, 2007
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    so well written i luv luv luv luv luv it u r soo talented Best blessings + giggles -- Fate


  • warrior-eagle
    November 17, 2007

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    This was interesting to me.
    And it was well written.
    you did a good job here.

    ..Simply Me♥


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    November 16, 2007

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    Pure poetry at it's absolute best!

    So deserving of the gold trophy too!
    You really did so well in this poem, just captured us
    thoroughly and completely. Every stanza is filled with
    golden poetry!
    Congrats! congrats! congrats!
    ears2hearyou
    Kathleen : ))


  • SpydurPoet gold member
    November 14, 2007

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    Dark and beautiful. You did a fantastic job on this. Congratulations on your trophy!!
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~


  • lilith78
    November 12, 2007

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    The rhyme scheme and meter are well developed. The images are well choosen. The title is what caught my attention. Well done, poet!


  • ravensgift
    November 12, 2007

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    This was great. Good Luck in the contest. My favorite part 'The gods are crushed in the hearts of men.' and A skeletal grip on a skeleton key, unlocks mortal hearts in anxiety's sea' Great imagery.


  • rollingzen
    November 12, 2007
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    je suis 'la bete noire' est j'aime toute le monde


  • Mallig gold member
    November 12, 2007

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    Excellent piece, good use of dark imagery. Best of luck in the contest!


  • TheLostGirl
    November 12, 2007

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    I adore the imagery. it was very well written as far as that goes. But I do wonder where is the purpose of theis. what makes thehave meaning, I want to keep this but I dont know I will contemplate it but for now... we shall see


  • DreamersNIght13
    November 12, 2007

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    I love the images. I especially love your line "the gods are crushed in the hearts of men." Tis a very real truth in this day and ages. We destroy them as fast as we create them.


  • Tony El Great silver member
    November 12, 2007

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    I don't agree with the theology, but this is a well written poem. I think I liked the first stanza most of all, it really peaked the interest in everything the poem would have to say.


  • Disturbedmess silver member
    November 11, 2007

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    this is beautiful, its very vivid and very powerful, definently worthy of the gold. you have a wonderful rythem and flow, the ryhmns are so perfect. congrats again on the gold.

    ♥DM♥


  • seamaiden
    November 10, 2007

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    Oooohhhh, this is very dark and powerfully written. I keep hearing the words of "The Shadow" after reading this. "Who knows what evil lurks in the hearts of men? Only The Shadow knows." An excellent write and you deserved the gold you got for this one. Thank you for sharing with me. Keep writing poet. seamaiden ♥


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    November 10, 2007

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    wow this is just an amazing write and is beautifully penned from the imager its dark and cpativating
    well done

  • lyrebird gold member
    November 10, 2007

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    Wow, this is amazing. The flow is flawless and the imagery superb. Congrats on the well deserved gold! <3 Jojo


  • Poetic Tasha Moderators member
    November 10, 2007

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    excellent write....bravo on the flow and rhyme i actually enjoyed it [the rhyme i mean ]
    the last two lines are my fave, they really tie it all in.
    congrats on the gold.

    Tasha


  • LadyShiva
    November 10, 2007

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    This was excellent I can see why it won a gold!! The imagery was painted so perfectly I felt like I was just floating through the words watching the images pass me by!! I love the word usage and the rhyme scheme! Write on!!


  • cherche -d -ame
    November 10, 2007

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    congratulations on the well deserved Gold. This is excellently written and unfortunately it speaks the truth about the current state of our world. I wonder how long we can still call it "our world" for we really will have destroyed it in one way or another
    RE your author note "bete noire " is also used as a French term for " black sheep" as the black sheep of the family. I think they coined it after me j/k. Anyway...once again GREAT JOB!!!!!!!
    reenie


  • Blushing Lily
    November 10, 2007

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    You have definitely shed some light on the darkest hours of man's beating heart. The imagery brought such darkness, I could feel the cold numbness that this poem conveyed.


  • Naridill gold member
    November 10, 2007

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    I have always admired your writing ability. You have a key eye for perfect phrasing and beautiful wording. Love this.
    "The gods are crushed
    in the hearts of men."


  • PerfectImperfection
    November 10, 2007

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    This is such a very well spoken piece. The flow and imagery together are just amazing... Truly thought provoking, for the is so much truth to be found even in between the lines. Great write!


  • bones7
    November 10, 2007
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    great poem

  • SpydurPoet gold member
    November 10, 2007
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    Oooh. This is absolutely amazing. You did a dark and beautiful job with the prompt and the rhyme and flow was excellent!!
    Write on!
    ~*~SP~*~

  • Seeking Peace silver member
    November 10, 2007

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    I can clearly see why this was chosen as a gold trophy piece, the darkness just oozes from every line, the rhyme is wonderful and the whole piece is structured so well, congrats

    Karen


  • Denierim
    November 5, 2007

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    Strong and amazing! By each poem I read from you, you surprise me even more. I simply love the dark wording you used and the vivid imagery there... I love stories about the Grim Reaper mainly because there's so many stories to him, and this is one of my very favorites. I think this is my favorite work from yours in general...

    You keep writing and surprising me! You're a great talent and those don't come ahead in life just every day.

  • Zarokk666
    November 2, 2007

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    This is one awesome write my friend
    I liked that you made a link to Macbeth
    I really like it
    See you


  • Heartless Angel
    October 31, 2007

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    macabe and cynical. :D i love it

    A most inspiring poem. Especially for the spirit of Halloween. Another winner. Happy All Hallow's Eve.

    -Lilli.

  • Zarokk666
    October 24, 2007
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    I like your piece friend
    pretty cool
    keep writing frind


  • Misfortune
    October 22, 2007

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    I am at a loss for words. . .
    Just. . . WOW.
    This was excellent. The rhyming didn't seem forced at all, and the flow was amazing.

    My favorite stanza:
    "The blackbird cries,
    a haunted moan.
    Angels have fallen,
    encase in stone."

    Truly magnificent and a wonderful read.

    -Misfortune.


  • Electric Sunrise gold member
    October 22, 2007

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    I had wondered from even before your entry if this was the image you would chose, it seemed to scream Chelsea for me, and i was right

    Now to the business at hand

    My favourite line: The gods are crushed
    in the hearts of men

    My overall thoughts: I feel the rhyming scheme may have restricted you a tad with where you wanted to go here, but then i've noted over time you, you of all people, can do some delightfully dark things with a rhyming scheme and by god i shall not be disputing that with this piece either.

    I'll be honest, i love the piece, i feel it's only downfall lies in this line here: "by chaos's hands" i personally feel the "'s" is unneeded and the piece would work just as well without it, but then, thats merely my impression and far be it for me to tell you how to write

    All in all i love it, another excellent piece from a brilliant writer, cheers for the entry hun, best of luck

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