We gaze up at the stars
Shining their seemingly
Never ending light
Cuddled on a blanket
By the water's edge
Feeling each others warmth
Could it be more perfect
Than it is right now
Could it ever get any better
No one is around
It is just me and you
Our hands intertwined
Stars shoot overhead
A beautiful rain of light
Blazing above us
Author notes
my dream date pretty much.
Please tell me what you think
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ive always wanted to have a night under the stars but i never get a chance... i hope that someday i can have your poems definition of a night under the star
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Dream date huh...oooooooo..somebody is in love [no i'm just playin..again very nice..this made me think...about someone..hmmmm...but [uh o] you just ended it so...abruptly
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it is kind of an abrupt ending, but it is a work in progress. I just hit a block when I got there, I've been trying to figure a way to continue it.
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thats good i'll be waiting 4 the conclusion
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Aww I think that is romantic. I would love to lay out somewhere and just watch the stars with the one I love. This poem had a nice flow to it. Was very well written and thanks for the read.
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ooooo... elissa... how dare u!!!!!!!... this is not mennonite!!!!!... u hethan!!... lol... jk... u do whtever u want 2 in ur dreams... lol.. but this is a pretty good poem... i think... lol
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