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Your Poison

I hate you
I cannot stand you
Your presence tarnishes existence
Your insincere actions polluting the air
Making it hard to breathe

And yet I crave it
I seek to breathe this polluted air without realising it
For I cannot hold my breath indefinitely

You speak, I listen
Your words tumble forth
An unceasingly beautiful river of words
Charming and sickeningly sweet

I hate you, but I hate myself more
For despite knowing your conniving ways
I am drawn to you
I accept your dangerous words, knowing their intentions

And alas, as I foretold
These poisoned words have hit their mark
My heart doth wilt
Tears fall unbidden down my cheeks
I fall to my knees

And I am yours.

How can I make this better?

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  • BrownEyedGirl575
    September 22, 2009

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    Wow. Full of strong emotion, very powerful. Imagery and metaphor is great, I like the use of the opposites in "charming and sickeningly sweet," it really helps to paint your word picture. The ending just really brings it home. Excellent write.