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Not Today





Words pierce flesh
..not yours
Music rejoices soul
..not yours
Time heals wounds
..not yours
Compassion erodes egos
..not yours
Love livens the day
..not yours

As you busy yourself
Living for that future thing
(yet) Unowned..
As moments pass by
Unlived
As the hearts cant
Unheard
As love's flying feel
Doesnt flutter
Its wings.

Not yours (yet),
Not today.

Someday??




Author notes

Prompt: "Words pierce flesh"
Thank you Dear Virgoan for this contest idea.. just what this moment needed.

A contest entry

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  • Wolf Mistress silver member
    November 7, 2007

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    Ofcourse you will have love in your life someday, and it might be even better than you can imagine and sooner than you can think of right now...
    And if you ever need a listener..I understand what you wanna say without the sound

    I will pray for that
    XXJeannette


    • fathom me
      November 28, 2007

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      Hey J Yes M'am Love shall triumph a cynical heart someday.. thank you for listening You = good listener

  • Virgoan silver member
    November 6, 2007

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    Very unique and full of thoughts to ponder. Lovely write.

    Thanks for sharing and keep writing.

    VIRGOAN


  • Mari Goes
    October 26, 2007

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    Every day is someone's day, and one day light will shine upon those who have lost hope.
    You know, the best moments in life are unexpected happy moments.
    Você é uma caixinha de pensamentos


    • fathom me
      November 28, 2007
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      Your words come true yet once again

      btw wat does 'Você é uma caixinha de pensamentos' mean?? It sounds interesting


  • arnica karuna
    October 26, 2007

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    hmm...lovely write... i am really impressed by the novelty of this poem. It is really innovative an idea and moreover, your words seem to flow in unison as always, creating a river of what you feel and want the readers to know.
    My favorite part:
    "As you busy yourself
    Living for that future thing
    (yet) Unowned..
    As moments pass by
    Unlived
    As the hearts cant
    Unheard
    As love's flying feel
    Doesnt flutter
    Its wings."
    Just check the grammar (consider apostrophe use wherever required all through the write. Apart from this, the whole write is amazing!
    Very impressive and highly commendable!
    Cheers! keep writing and thanks for sharing.


  • wattle silver member
    October 21, 2007

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    Ms Me, and perhaps (maybe) on the end. --- This is a wonderful rich write. It has you on every line and provokes a silent response. ---- Thank you.

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