From the beginning,
We didn't know each other.
We hadn't spoken a lot.
But then one night,
something brought us together.
We got extremely close,
I thought nothing could break us apart.
You told me you would be there
For me whenever I needed you.
I took your word for it.
But then there was that one
Day where things got awkward between us.
I didn't know why but
I realized how much I
Missed you.
You was there
Then you were gone.
When I needed you the most,
I couldn't find you.
And when I found you,
You didn't see me.
I was just another invisible face in the crowd.
I confronted you about it.
You said you didn't know.
Glad that I told you the problem,
You said you would fix it.
I'm still here,
Waiting for the day that you
Take time out of your life and
Care about me.
The day that once again
We will be joined together in
Harmony.
A contest entry
- heartbroken by the one you love by Purple-Meow.
525 points, ended October 23, 2007, 12 entries
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700 points, ended November 1, 2007, 75 entries
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wow i totally understand this.... i feel like this right now. i totally thought i was alone. but this poem makes me realize i am not alone. thank you. i loved it. -
This is a great poem. i really get the point of it. i love the emotion in the poem it is really good i really like the part when you said you needed him and he wasnt there. i really do like this it is very touching...
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Great! I really like how you say that when you needed him the most, he wasnt ther
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amazing.just simply amazing i love the feeling u show in this poem.
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great write
just simply amazing....
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nice. Very heartfelt, and strong ending. But, guys aren't worth it, btw (if this is a true story)
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oh wow! great write! (btw, you put "was" instead of "were" at the end of the first paragraph) lol good job though! ^.^
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This was really great
awesome job on this work, i thoroughly enjoyed this. You did an awesome job on this piece
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i liked this write alot thanks
GOOD LUCK -
I can relate to this one alot, its so sad and heartbreaking to read that you it brings you back to a time that your heart has been broken. You really captured what it means to have a break heart you should be proud.
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Very nice, I haven't read much poetry lately, but this was good. Its nice to let out your emotions and feelings in a poem.j
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Good overall,
When I needed you the most,
I couldn't find you.
And when I found you,
But you didn't see me.
Only thing I'd suggest altering is the line: But you didn't see me. Just drop the "but" and it would flow better. Otherwise, good job. Keep penning! -Inc."
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