The Long Ride by Amera at All poetry

The Long Ride

I could see the light as I blinked my eye
out the window of my coach, I looked out.
Why was I summoned by the King; O why?
Doubt from within as I fought with my doubt.

Palace walls grew, approaching the palace.
Oak springs cushioning my carriage of oak.
Callus was I and the King was callous.
Cloak my feelings as I’m wrapped in my cloak.

Arrived at the gate, we finally arrived,
sought to leave but it was I that they sought.
Survived the ordeal; had others survived?
Brought to the throne, where royals were brought.

Sin took the King, he had died from his sin.
Twin brothers were born and I was his twin.

Author notes

Challenge: happy and sad at the same time with the two ideas clashing.

Shadow Sonnet
May be written in any sonnet style. The Shadow takes place at the beginning and ending of each line as the words are identical or homophonic.
14 lines
9 to 11 syllables per line
Should have a volta or pivot
Iambic pentameter is not necessary
Source: shadowpoetry.com
Art Work by: PReilly

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A contest entry

read the directions by Hiddenspaces. 1200 points, ended October 30, 2007, 2 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

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Desire
October 22, 2007

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Wow!!
Very creative and Love this form You have penned!
Beautifully presented and what a story
I don't believe I have tried a Shadow Sonnet
but will eventually give it a whirl~~
Thank You for sharing Your Talent!!

Best wishes to You in the contest
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
Eusebius
October 22, 2007

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Bravo
Oh, this IS so neat and so nifty! A marvelous twist in the final line! excellent, superb, wonderful! I loved it, loved it, absolutely loved it! bravo... bravo... bravo...
Jalalbad
October 22, 2007
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Amazing write
The end took me by surprise.
Judy
PerVirtuous
October 22, 2007

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Hmmm. Reminds me of the man in the iron mask... Well written... full of angst and hope... very well crafted and interesting. I give it... three bunnies.
Kiran
October 21, 2007

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What a fantastic sonnet. It's a challenge but you have made this look effortless. Excellent language and imagery throughout which kept me captivated. Well done with this.
Cup-a-Joe
October 21, 2007
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Outstanding.
"Doubt from within as I fought with my doubt" That's me..lol Nice reading here Amera
Poetic-Theorem
October 21, 2007

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Brilliant!!!!
You know that I am a fan of your "Shadow Sonnet." One must really think very much in writing every line to produce a "Shadow Sonnet"...I know and have tried but did not come out well.

This write is splendid...drama, emotions---both good and sad, and a shocker for an ending as well. What else can one ask for from an excelent poem written in a brilliant form.

I don't know the details of this contest, but you have my vote for sure. VERY IMPRESSIVE!

Good luck in the contest!

Take Care,
Much Love,

David
captain howdy
October 21, 2007

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Well you know how to take a challenge and twist it to your advantage as you pen line after line of pure magic. I am going to have to try one of these shadow sonnets sometime.
HaleyMary
October 21, 2007

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What a challenge for a write and you did well with it, Sis. Wonderful sonnet form as always. I liked the ending. It made me think of how even though a family member may pass on, we can have some comfort in thinking that the children of the family members are still alive and can help keep the memory of the deceased alive. Good luck in the contest.
Hiddenspaces
October 21, 2007

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Kudos my friend(may i presume?)
good job.thank you very much for such a wonderful write...the end was a clincher..that is for sure.
H.