What am I doing?
How did I get here?
Existential bullshit
floats around
my head
like pesky
gnats that
won’t go away.
I take a deep
drag of my cigarette
like I was trying
to suck the
soul out of it
It crackles.
This comforts me,
I breathe in again.
Seeing my breath as
I exhale reminds
me that I
am still alive.
I balance the
growing ash
on my Marlboro.
I'm overwhelmed with
the desire to
not let
it drop. It
whispers in
my head.
[Don’t
Let
It drop.]
I suck in
again,
the ash glows.
[Don’t
Let
It
Drop]
I exhale again, reminding
myself I’m alive
[I'm still alive]
My cigarette crackles.
I watch smoke
rise up to
the exposed light
bulb on my
cracked ceiling.
A moth circles
the smoke
- and the bulb.
I try to
swat it away
but it keeps
going back to that
bulb,
allowing itself
to get burned
by the heat.
That’s my
life I think.
Shaking off the thought
I take a drag of my
cigarette...
And watch
the ashes
fall.
In a list
A contest entry
- Wherever you are stop and write! by alexandrathegreat.
1800 points, ended October 24, 2007, 31 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Moths by MothandRust.
450 points, ended September 26, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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It's sad, i like to go outside at nighttime, when the world is a sleep and just contemplate. I smoke my cigarettes and verbally talk out my issues...with myself...that might be a little crazy, but it helps. I like it. Great poem, nice trophies.
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i just put out a ciggie but you make me want to light another, shame on you lol you will kill me
ah tyhe marls, they have a nice taste, i just smoke whatever shot is available, sometimes i have gone to train stations and just collected dimps now that's a good smoke for it is free
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Merry meet,
Congratulations on winning the Gold. This was a tough contest with a lot of talent entered in. Congratulations again on your win.
Amythest -
This was a great write you should
have entered this into much more contests.
YOu wrote it all out so reflectively and effectively.
ears2hearyou
Kathleen : ))
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I really like what you have written here
It's full of great imagery and that's what I'm looking for in poetry
Very well done!
Thanks for entering the contest, I wish you the best of luck!
Leander -
You caught a moment in time succinctly, with emotions of the moment thrown in. Of course, there is despair in the final few lines, as well as inuendos of death (ash to ash). NIcely dark to me.
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Existential I love it. HA I studied it so much in High School and it drags on so much but it is such an accurate picture of life today. There is something to be studied and learned from this poem about life whether you know it or not. Interesting look on things. Thank you for entering.
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This poem kept me to my screen from the first hale till the ash falls down....
"That's my life I think"...I loved the way you made me read your thoughts so very close....
Damn, I am also sorry to say I know this one
Only Pall Mall is my flav
I still am trying to get those damn things out of my life...
XXJeannette
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At first, i thought this would be about prison, lol. "Dont let it drop" thought that was about soap, lol. my bad. But either way it was great. Loved how much meaning you put into a cig, though i really hate them. Nice one.
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