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Stay for a while

Je voudrais pouvoir vous dire de tout ce que je voulais
Et comment j'ai été très heureux de voir ma vie courir à travers vous.
Le temps a été cruel pour les deux parties.
Nous n'avons jamais trouvé l'amour et ils ont brisé notre confiance.

Vous avez été brisée, entachée, et si confus.
Je veux juste saisir détenir et de dire que je t'aime toujours.

Je vois dans vos yeux que vous laissez votre passé vous baissent.
Vous êtes optimiste pour l'avenir, quand on regarde autour.
Vous avez peur de moi et il est normal de l'être.
Je sais que je ne suis pas parfaite et je ne possède pas la clé,
Mais je voudrais faire quelque chose pour vous faire sourire.

Je veux simplement vous demander, "s'il vous plaît, y reste."

Author notes

I decided after reading Tash' last post to repost this in French. The translation is a little off, but I find it interesting. You can use this link to translate.
http://translate.google.com/translate_t?langpair=en|fr

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  • lowercase prelude gold member
    July 9, 2008
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    amazing work here.

    such a wonderful, heartfelt write. beautiful


  • adsaige
    December 1, 2007

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    En célébration de cette pièce magistrale, j'ai décidé de vous laisser commentaire en français ... c'est merveilleux parce que le français est effectivement ma langue maternelle, et je sais un peu ... et c'est pourquoi je prends l'an prochain, afin je puisse ma visite Restants de la famille en France et parler avec eux.

    J'ai adoré cette partie: "Vous avez été brisées, des imperfections, et si confus. Je veux juste prendre en main et de dire que je vous aime toujours." Dieu, Corrupt, il vous suffit de savoir comment briser mon effin coeur. Je t'aime tellement pour la façon dont vous semblez être capable d'écrire tout ce que je ne peux pas dire!


  • creationsfromheart
    November 30, 2007

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    French is so passionate:)

    I love this part
    You are optimistic for the future, when one looks at around. You are afraid of me and it is normal to be it. I know that I am not perfect and I do not have the key,

    "Je sais que je ne suis pas parfait et je n'ai pas la clef, mais je voudrais faire quelque chose vous faire le sourire."

    C'est merveilleux et vos mots si doux


  • RX-Queen
    November 29, 2007

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    Perfectly Beautiful

    this one is well... let's just say it almost brought a tear to my eye. thanx for suggesting it, I really like this one.


  • Nobody Important
    November 25, 2007
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    that is ace


  • PerfectImperfection
    November 23, 2007

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    The translation IS a bit off, don't you just love that?? Even still, it is beautiful. I adore the french language, and this piece is complemented well by it.
    Once again, I really enjoyed this - it is one that holds potency after many reads. Take Care!

  • ms. kitty kat
    November 2, 2007

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    Great Poem

    you did a awesome job on writing this. my favorite part is:

    I see in your eyes you let your past get you down.
    You're hopeful for the future when you look around.
    You're scared of me and it's okay to be.
    I know I'm not perfect and I don't hold the key,
    but I would do anything to make you smile.

    I like this poem a lot.

    kat


  • badddgirl
    October 26, 2007
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    I stand in awe!

    This is so beautiful and real, I wish somebody would write me a poem such as this, hell I would probably marry them. Well I would consider it anyways.
    I aim to check out more of your writes, thanks for the comment on my poem ( or story rather ).
    I still am not sure what to do with the rest of it.

    I just want to ask you, "please, stay for a while."


  • aligurl
    October 25, 2007
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    OHHHH

    Amazing... It made me want to cry... If a guy wrote this for me, I definately would stay a while!! Amazing piece. Beautiful and heartfelt. She's a lucky girl.


    • Menace
      October 25, 2007
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      Would it surprise you to hear she's never read this. In fact, she's never even seen one of my poems. she left as fast as she came back through.

      • aligurl
        October 25, 2007

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        What???

        I'm so sorry. Well it was her loss. Read something like that for the next girl and you never know... you just might find the right one... pshhh... girls these days... lol but again beautiful write...


  • grannyeri gold member
    October 25, 2007

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    Sentiments well expressed in these lines - can fee the hurt she went through because of you and how you wish it could be different and still hope that things can come back around and you be given another chance. Easy to read and understand what you are saying here. Nice ending to the poem - an opening to a second chance.


  • Grimoire
    October 25, 2007

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    Awwwwww

    The first two lines are great, they hold weight in the memories of everyone. Even those people who have never gotten that second chance to have someone "run back through" them. There seems, to me, to be the subtle implication that the line
    ~ I see in your eyes you let your past get you down~
    may actually be you describing how you felt you let her down. Because I am a little demented, I gathered some dark intentions from
    ~ You're scared of me.......be~
    ~ "please, stay for a while"~
    to me it brings the image of fear which is comforted by this......"please, stay for a while. I won't keep you long, I'll keep you FOREVER!"

    • Menace
      October 25, 2007
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      Nicely taken

      I think you pretty well grasped the full meaning of the poem. I did let her down at one point and it was the beginning to her demise. Now she has overcome and I wonder what I missed in her the first time. Thanks for the comments.

  • PalmettoSky
    October 25, 2007

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    this was really heartfelt...so raw and real...I liked the feel of this...had a rocker kind of edge to it...great writing fellow poet. Thanks for sharing your talent...keep up the awesome work. peace and light always in all ways, kendal


  • Gods-Artgal
    October 25, 2007
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    This is a great poem.


  • DangerousCereal
    October 25, 2007

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    I'LL BE RIGHT HERE!!!!

    This was absolute brilliance!! I was touched so very deeply by this piece!! Very nice indeed! Wow!! I wish I could applaud more than once!!! Actually I think I'll feature this!! Awesome write!!

    • Menace
      October 25, 2007
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      You must still be featuring this. I am getting comment after comment. Even from poets I've never met. Thank you.

  • PerfectImperfection
    October 25, 2007
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    This is honestly one of the best poems I have read in a while. Such a very deep longing and sincere expression for what the heart desires. Excellent penning!


  • Festering Eye Sore
    October 22, 2007
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  • MsCha0s
    October 21, 2007

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    very real

    these lines fit very nicely into a little space in my life...i am grateful that you were able to put these feelings into words so much better than i ever could have. you ripped open my soul and allowed me to see inside...thank you


  • I Should Kill You
    October 21, 2007
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    perfect

    This is the exact way I feel about some one. Have you been reading my mind?


  • doyouloveit
    October 21, 2007

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    though these our your words written here i know these words on a personal level from another and its like you got inside my life and wrote it down on paper though i know i am sure this write is personal to you as well in your own life this touched me deep inside almost bringing a tear to my eyes if i'd only let myself

    I just want to ask you, "please, stay for a while."

    i can never stay long enough in one's life i am afraid this line hit hard thank you for sharing your thoughts with us this piece is wonderful


  • Poetic Tasha Moderators member
    October 21, 2007

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    awe this one is sad, yet somewhat sweet & honest.
    i really enjoyed this side of your thoughts. more please

    Tasha

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