"Horrendous hurricanes
and jolting demographic
changes";
Rain upon our cities with
Diversity of visions and
Fantasies,
Which brings opportunities
For some, while ordeals
For others.
"Shapeless gray trousers"
Walk through wooden doors:
Managers and owners groan
Right down to the bone.
Author notes
Oh, for informational purposes only, I am a card carrying member of the ACLU, and here is my membership number: 68649508.
Written from the following word list and partial phrases: vision, fantasy, ordeal,"horrendous hurricanes and demographic changes", "shapeless gray trousers", wooden door; taken from this novel:
"Trace", by Patricia Cornwell, copywright by Cornwall Enterprises 2004, Berkley Books ISBN 0-425-20420-0
Other than the title: As read at Newberry Books, Seattle 10/20/2007; a Poets West venue
http://www.newberrybooksseattle.com/
Title changed on: 10/23/2007 DCK
See also: "Olde Seattle's Epitaph":
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3516496
See also: http://allpoetry.com/poem/2203078
For more information on Historic Preservation, just click on the following Google Links:
http://www.google.com/search?sourceid=navclient&ie=UTF-8&rls=RNWO,RNWO:2008-24,RNWO:en&q=%3CHistoric+Restaurant+Association+%2D+Seattle%3E
http://www.google.com/search?sourceid=navclient&ie=UTF-8&rls=RNWO,RNWO:2008-24,RNWO:en&q=%3CHistoric+Preservation%3E
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A really excellent and nifty word bank poem, I just love seeing what folks come up with, and in this particular case it is highly original and most certainly made me smile! bravo!!!
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I create my word lists from novels; signage, names of objects in coffee shops or whatever. I have never used AP's word bank. However, calling my word list a "word bank", is ok with me. I do appreciate your comments, and compliments.
However, the real meaning of this poem will be found by clicking on the footnotes(URL's) in the Author Note's section. Hopefully, if you haven't already glanced at them , you'll find time to do so, of course, that is entirely up to you.
Thanks again for commenting, my friend.
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This just made me think of the horrendous losses of all forms of houses, including some great Victorian mansions, in New Orleans and Galveston due to hurricanes and floods -- certainly these resulted in "demographic changes" -- and as always, "property acquirers/flippers" who buy trashed real estate cheaply from bankrupt owners, fix and wait, and sell high. When read in this light, your lines make perfect sense; I guess it depends on the reader's context. I loved it!
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Thank you for your thoughtful comments; compliments and applause, for I do appreciate them.
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beautifuly interesting.
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First and second pass were just too cryptic for me...
If you want to stand alone it needs work. The Arthor's notes flesh things a bit.
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Thank you for your comments; I do appreciate them.
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I agree with your writing. Shame how many benefit off the ills or misfortunes of others. Some are like vultures waiting for the sickly to fall and not rise, as they move in to clean the body of all flesh. Thank you for sharing this thoughtful write.
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Aye, my friend, I quite agree with your comments. Thank you for them, compliment and applause. I do appreciate them. Here's a link to click on, in which you may have an interest.
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Thank you I apprciate this very much.
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interesting. I am guessing that the title was one of the words that you had to use cuz I really don't think it fits the poem very well. Other than that it is a very good poem.
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Thank you for your comment, compliment and applause. I do appreciate them. I titled it "Mansions", because the men in 'shapeless grey trousers' represent rich developers.
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Nicely done. I like the imagery. It flows well. The grey trousers walking through wooden doors reminded me of the cheap hotels for the poor in many cities.
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Thank you for your comment and compliment. I do appreciate both.
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Creatively penned with much imagery. The flow is wonderful and the depth of this piece intriguing. Your words choice was impeccable to say the least. I would have to agree with the previous comment in regards to the title though. It seems out of place for where your thoughts flow inside the lines. Thank you for sharing your words with me and best wishes to you in the contest. Keep that quill dipped in ink and ever ready for use.
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The title is meant to be ironic and reflects the various tragedies that occur to many individuals, and families, due to gentrification. Why replace affordable and low income housing with condos for the rich?
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Good
I am not sure how the title ties into your poem. By the title and the categories that the poem is in I thought it would be more about materialism and consumerism. It is but I think it needs to be made a little more concrete. Great start! -
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The title is meant to be ironic. The poem itself is symbolical of the tragedies associated with gentrification within our cities, ie, wealthy developers coming in, buying up properties and driving the middle class, working poor and poor out of their homes and nieghborhoods (some decent nieghborhoods), to be replaced by condos that only the rich can afford. In Seattle, I believe we need more affordable housing, and low income housing instead of more condos for rich folks.
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This is great.
Glad I stopped by to read.
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Thank you for both your comment and compliment. I appreciate them.
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Very nice write, good metaphor usage
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Thanks for your comment and compliment. I do appreciate both.
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