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Solitude

 

 

Lonely walks

thick bushy embankments

stolen promises -

you'll always have me

you'll always have someone

One gentle push

it all fell right through

nobody here now

nobody here to comfort you

As the weather takes you

the times engulf you

the overgrown grass captures you -

But you'll always be on your own

Author notes

Solitude? -
Hard to say really.

It's about someone who's given up hope in friends, love and family as people have either died or betrayed the words 'I'll always be here for you'. It's a very sad write really, about someone walking along life on their own, fearing company.


1. I've been on AP for nearly 2 years on this account, but I was on another account for a year, so all together 3 years.
2. x Empathic Rose x
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  • Blooming Poet
    May 11, 2008

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    http://allpoetry.com/contest/show/2404559
    Next round.


  • Blooming Poet
    May 9, 2008
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  • Blooming Poet
    May 2, 2008
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    This is amazing, you said so much with so few words. Congratulations you have made it into the next round. All the judges appear to love it.


  • warrior-eagle
    April 27, 2008

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    50/50 for following rules
    25/25 for overall poetic ability
    25/25 for Creativity in writing, pics or backgrounds added.


  • BlissfullyIgnorant
    April 26, 2008
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    It definately has strong emotions.
    Keep writing.


  • maralisa silver member
    March 27, 2008

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    a great poem lonly walks as the weather takes you the times engulf you the overgrown grass captures you but you'll wlways be one your own
    good luck in the contest


  • AddictingAccident
    March 26, 2008

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    great write. full of emotion. Wonderfully written. excellent ending Good luck and thank you for entering =]]]


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    January 6, 2008

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    Excellent poem congratulations on the trophies I wish you the best of luck in my contest thank you for entering


  • katie-jo
    December 30, 2007
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    This is so tragic, to lose hope in people. Even more tragic to have the promise of someone always there for you, only they turn around on a whim and stab you in the back.
    Excellently written.

    Thank you for entering and all the best in the contest.
    Happy New Year!
    ~kate-flamingo


  • Tangled Angle
    December 10, 2007
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    loved imagery. very well done.


  • Naridill gold member
    December 5, 2007
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    Please read rules before entering
    & make sure you follow them.
    • Not commented on by me.
    [Won silver in first of my contests]


  • second-born
    December 4, 2007

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    Indeed solitude is our skin…solitude reminds us that we’ll ‘always be on your own…’ thank for sharing this lonely yet lovely poem…


  • Mildew in PinK tile
    November 23, 2007
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    oh btw i need a sn in the authors comment id hate to DQ you for that so please add that in sometime soon! ill be checking

  • Mildew in PinK tile
    November 22, 2007

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    whoa.
    this is something i have not read before and i love how it fits together with the topic.. its just amazing.
    thank you so much for entering!


  • daviscth silver member
    October 28, 2007

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    WOW!! This is a sad piece you have composed. But in its only way, I found that it held beauty as well.

    Congrats on placing in the contest, it was very deserving, Cathy


  • Aquamarine.
    October 24, 2007

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    this is really sad.....this has a great meaning to it tho ive never wwalked thru life alone i fear doing just that pushing everyone away until im all alone....this poem is awesome i loved it

  • Naridill gold member
    October 23, 2007

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    Beautifully sad, this one is relative and shows alot of emotion. You really went beyond the picture and dug deep where the imagery fell right into place.

    Nicely done & thanks for entering.
    Much luck


  • freespirit51
    October 21, 2007

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    Beautiful work my friend. I really enjoyed this. The loneliness and emotions flow well through your wonderfully chosen words. Great work..Good luck in the contest.


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    October 21, 2007

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    this is a beautiful poem which uses strong and powerful words
    i loved this sis well done and best of luck


  • Shadow Seraphim
    October 21, 2007

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    Such a wonderful Poem . how the words ring true,.. I really like this poem... good luck in the contest..
    Keep up the great work... and Blessed Be!

    Lady Rhiannon Raven

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