Oh God
this is the amorousness
you sanctified to every atom
not only to the human beings
to give-and-take the fluid while making love
you even eased a flower
to make loving
by a ritual of ecstasy
Oh God
A contest entry
- Nature PIF by CarolDesjarlais.
625 points, ended October 23, 2007, 9 entries
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You know, in one of my workshops with youth, I mention this give and take of fluids as the most sacred thing to share... this was a great write my friend.
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well that was a sexy little write!..
I found,"you sanctified to every atom," to be my favorite part.
This read gave me some interesting imagery...and a different view on certain things!
I really enjoyed reading this, and thanks for sharing!
best of luck in th contest!!
keep the pen flowing
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...he took upon himself the bonds of this creation...by Rabindranath Tagore, this line helps me to see the image you painted here, 'sanctified every atom', not only those of humanity, but all creation...I think I begin, finally, to understand, truly to understand...thank you for sharing this one...peace, Rhonda
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A powerful imagination given in evry word my friend
absoultly stunning
Good luck in the contest
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Laconic verse, to its best effect! Stunning imagery, and as usual a perfect mastery of the subject matter. Congrats, and best regards
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This is powerful and beautifully expressed.
A wonderful poem with wonderful imagery to compliment its meaningful expression. Great!
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