A miss behind this picture
So sweet, seducing the poets
Innocent looks with lotus eyes
And dimple cheeks of pink.
I mistook her looks
As she spotting a crowd
Trading the mind for the body
But her innocence melts my heart.
Beauty is liberating
More so the innocent maiden
A girl like that enliven the dark
I can but keep my eyes away.
Innocence change the despondency
But she despondent hurts me
I watched her movements without a thought
Just as one watches a crystal stream.
Arousal of sex has a place
Carnal craving lasts a while
But rusts with time and dampens
Beauty bereft of motive lasts forever.
Walking hand in hand
In a voyage of discovery
With every feeling come alive
Is great glue keeping us tied.
Depression despondency
But streaks left by a motive
The grace this lovely girl emits
Rub off the sufferings that desires bring.
Author notes
I do not want your body, I want your heart just like a father wants a daughters heart( I do not have any children)
A contest entry
- Seduce Me by Midnight Lace.
525 points, ended November 2, 2007, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Sex Or Love?? by Miss Kristy.
360 points, ended November 27, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - lust & love by whiterabbit..
375 points, ended January 6, 2008, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Very nice
what a contradiction. Innocence and all the horrors. Growth of sexuality accepting the knowledge that we act different w/others. But in the end behold her tender heart, hold tight the hand that binds....
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This is a very beautiful poem. God bless you for sharing and keep up the excellent work. Thank you for entering this contest and good luck my fellow poetic friend.
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Gorgeous!
This has such grace. It is a beautiful flowing poem! Very great write!!
Good luck
and good luck in your other contests
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That was beautiful. keep up the good work.
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A very well written beautiful piece.
I wonder about the line As she spotting a crowd though. I don't quite get that.
How very true, this one stanza. And the one I liked the most
Arousal of sex has a place
Carnal craving lasts a while
But rusts with time and dampens
Beauty bereft of motive lasts forever
A body is a body, but nothing beats to truly have someones heart. No matter if its sexual love or love of a daughter
Great Job, I enjoyed the read
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Very good , I liked how you place each part of the relationship of being innocent then desire.
Yes i feel a woman is reached through her mind first , then the heart!
Enjoyed the read,
~Lisa~
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Well Done
You have penned a great poem, it speaks from the heart and touches all who read it, great job
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Awww This is such a sweet poem of seduction, adoration, and love. You have captured what it means to try to seduce a young a lady. You must first get her heart, before you can have her body. Thank you for an awesome read and for bringing a smile to my face. Thank you for taking the time to pen this and enter it into my contest. Best of wishes to you in the contest dear poet!
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mery good
"............Beauty bereft of motive lasts forever.."
what a wonderful line
enjoyable read
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'Carnal craving lasts a while
But rusts with time and dampens'
great lines those and oh so true
the first four lines do an excellent job of drawing the reader in. they are original
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very enjoyable!!
with each line i was drawn closeer and closer!!
very nice write!! best of luck in the contest!!
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Very good descriptive writing and wording, has good imagery This starts out in a beautiful way as you read it makes you want to finish These are my favorite two stanza's
Walking hand in hand
In a voyage of discovery
With every feeling come alive
Is great glue keeping us tied.
Depression despondency
But streaks left by a motive
The grace this lovely girl emits
Rub off the sufferings that desires bring.
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dada......completely different than of your earlier poems. nice job done. you have possessed the power to break your type. its good enough.
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Very Nice Write
Your style and talent show the reader that this is a piece worth reading. It starts out innocent and builds up to a crecendo that takes the reader to a wonderland of visions..Thank you for sharing....LC
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I love how this begins out so sweet and then merged into a wanting, draws you in before you realize it. Well done, enjoyed your poem and good luck in the contest.
Jen
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