You want someone to belong to
To hold you forever
Someone to be true
Someone to show you
How much love a heart can hold
Someone to give you everything
And that person is me...
You want someone to love you
To tell you how special you are
Someone to tell you
How they are falling for you
Someone who wants you
To tell them all about you
Someone to take your hand
And promise to never let go...
I can do this and so much more
All I'm asking for
All I need from you
Is to let me prove
That I can love you better
Let me love you better
'Cause you deserve the world
Just give me the chance
To prove to you that
I can love you better...
Just one chance...
One opportunity...
I can love you better...
Take a look into my heart and soul...
Gaze into my eyes...
I can love you better.
Give me the good and the bad
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who's this poem for?
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my ex fiance, Victoria.. I screwed up and I just wish I had a second chance
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awsome
I thought it was awsome...loved everything about it.
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Thank you. I tried to rhyme, but it didn't work, but is poetry about rhyme? I've been told it is, and I have been told it's not. Maybe you have an answer?
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comment first: nicely written, good use of language. the last line was the best in my opinion, it drew the poem more together.
now for the critique:
slight typo in the line
"You want someoneto belong to"
and a spelling mistake near the end of the poem:
oppertunity = opportunity -
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Thank you. I will fix the errors once my computer quits acting retarded. lol I appreciate your time and thought.
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