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Cigar Box






He kept a gun

in a cigar box

underneath

a quilt his mama made him

on a shelf

high enough

and far enough away.

Connie only used it once.




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  • Suzanne Dia
    October 30, 2007

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    Thought I had commented this already.

    I do like Connie's story...

    I keep coming back to him. He's tragic and fascinating at the same time.


  • J.J. Sass
    October 25, 2007

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    I wonder what made Connie use it. I definitely want more.

    Best wishes in the contest.

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    October 21, 2007
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    A concise write,short,sharp with impact.Imagery with clarity and poetic devices,particularly liked the alliteration of mama made.The open ended he only used it once does leave the reader wanting more,for there are a myriad reasons for it having been used once.Neat.


  • Rheea gold member
    October 21, 2007
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