the Amusing Identity of a Caustic Belly Endowed with an Insipid Pillar !!!
I find it amusing that
the identity of the menu, can
create caustic problems
with my belly contents.
Well endowed as it is, and as
insipid as it may appear, I still
find it to be a pillar with my choice
of takeaway food…!
ali-p 2003
Author notes
strange but true....i wanna prize, i wanna prize...gimm e gimme gimme...
Written October 10th, 2003
A contest entry
- October New Members- "Chin Up" Poetry Contest - Hosted by The AllPoetry Greeter Staff by CookieZeal.
300 points, ended November 3, 2003, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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LOL very funny. Very different and original. A very different usage of words there some very unusual words which really made it work. Keep up the good writing!
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gaun yersel big yin
shaggz.... "not all the critera was meet, as a poem it is good, "
Ive already explained above how it does meet the criteria in my views and if you or any other doubter would like to participate in a binge of 'depression fodder' then feel free to try it out.
an example would be ....how many of us get that special lift when we've eaten our favourite chocolate bar????
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ah... absolutely amazing. lol. I took a completely different approach (as did nearly everyone) to this contest, and I loved how you strayed from the beaten path. lol... incredible... and to agree with gemini's comment here... another nutter! Quite the compliment.
~Christy -
I do belive we have yet another nutter in our ranks on AP
Thanks for the entry - it's funny and very clever.
~Von~
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This is good...reall
y good...I like it alot it makes me think as well as smile at the same time when traditionall y thought makes me frown. And a chuckle at the author comments as well...a prize indeed..."gi mme, gimme, gimme" greatsenseof humor...I like that!! Welcometo AP though I have already come accross your work...and I will wish you best of luck though I am pretty confident that you will not need luck with your skill to move...and as I now see amuse people...~ge nielassie~ -
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I was going to enter this contest, but figured that y poems are hardly ever cheery, even when i try to make them be...
Nor inspiring, unless i mange to inspire someone to throw themselves off a cliff... (if that counts)
I'm not too keen either on using words i don't understand the meanings of, and i was just too damed lazy to write them down.
Very witty, cheered me up.
BoL in the contest,
Keep writing,
Love Kimmy X -
not all the critera was meet, as a poem it is good,
good luck in the contest
peace bwe with & blessed be;
shaggy wolf
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Yeah not sure of all the critera needs here, but still a funny write! It meets part of the critera of the use of words, which you haved use well and with humour too! So good Luck!
Lakota x
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yeaaay! Loved it.
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It CERTAINLY has. It's evident that it was heartfelt AND LIVED. That makes a poem even better.
I appreciate the extra words - It's different and that makes it unique to the criteria, but equally as considered.
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"Not sure it meets the criteria as much..."
to explain a little for you...
all the words that were required were used and the idea of fast food, or food in general, is quite often the path that some use to lift themselves from the dark dreary road of depression.
Being a sufferer of Mental Health problems, where depression is a major factor in my life, I speak from reality ( if there is such a thing what is it?).
not wanting to be presumptious, but i hope this has shed a better light on this piece of 'wordart' for you....lol
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thanx...
it was the caustic belly that made me think of takeaways (probably some dark memories lurking in the back of my head about a curry I had once), but no takeaway shop was thought of intentionalythough....lo l
ali-p -
This was so entertaining
...lol.. And a class all its own. Not sure it meets the criteria as much, but I loved it anyhoo!!!!!! !!!!!
My weakness? It is creamy, savory thingies. Like egg salad with mayo on buttered WHITE bread. Fergie, of WeightWatchers, told us and I went with it once. Oh m'gosh. Sad thing. Couldn't feel satisfied. No fruit! hahaha
Better than M & M's though, I suppose!
Back to the subject:
The title is long, but has its comedic role. You may have broken a barrier...hehhee.. GOOD FOR YOU!!!!!! I must say that you wove the words in a very clean and sharp way. Thank you for your entry. CookieZeal
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lol, this was a great little write. Humorous, and you still managed to get all of the necessary words in there. And which fast food joint was this a tribute to?
My weakness is Subway, but McDonalds and all things Italian seem to force their way into my diet all of the time.
Welcome to AP, and I'm sure you'll get a prize if you keep producing poems like this.
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