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About Autumn

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In Autumn

God is at his best . .

Flinging nature

to the four winds

 

 

His finely crafted

works of art . .

Tossed from their lofty perches

To come helter skelter . . 

 

 

To rest in a floor strewn

Abstract work of art

That children descend upon  

In their search for conkers 

 

 

At its approach

Almost every colour

Is peppered across

The forest canopy

 

 

Such reds and golds . .

Far beyond the challenge

Of man’s academy of art 

 

 

A kaleidoscope of colour

The like of which

is hard to comprehend

and if you close you eyes

the rainbow is extended

as your senses go reeling

from the multifaceted

bouquet 

 

 

As the days peel away

toward inevitable winter

winds sharpen

cutting cheeks

sending chills and shudders  

down the spine . .

Whist children

play and shout

amongst natures debris . .

Older folk

pull their collars

to cover their ears  

As they stand guardian

Over bonfires

Listening to the twigs crackle

Whilst trying to avoid

the swirling smoke

from smoldering leaf piles

which invade the nostrils

Bringing tears to the eyes

whilst teasing the tastebuds   

with an exciting pungent

cooking odors

 

Yes . .

what can one say . .

 

Or not say . .

About Autumn

 

 

 

 

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  • Lyndon gold member
    April 19
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    Keep this poem

    for the Seasons Theme.


  • Ellis gold member
    December 31, 2007
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    I think you have said much here about Autumn.


  • agazeley gold member
    November 6, 2007
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    The editing is a bit of a mess . .

    I'v tried to improve the layout of this poem several time - but for some reason it will not reformate . .

    So I have left it in this clumsy form . .Sorry. .


  • PureRomance
    November 5, 2007
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    Amazingly Bravo!

    There isn't much I could say about this but two things. I agree with the previous posters, and I'd like to say this. This is a very very good poem. I really enjoyed reading it. You are a very good poet. You definitely have a gift for words. The picture this poem painted is very vivid. Keep up the great work. I loved this entire poem. Good job.


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    October 29, 2007

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    A brand new way to describe autumn..peppery...omg what a stunning description... my only critique would be the punctuation and capitalization not being congruent throughout the poem....but your autumn is stunning... ty for entering.


  • Lislaine
    October 25, 2007

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    wow

    amazing write... really great i liked it especially the part that says:As the days peel away

    toward inevitable winter

    winds sharpen

    cutting cheeks

    sending chills and shudders

    down the spine . .

    And whist children

    play and shout

    amongst natures debris . .

    older folk

    pull their collars

    to cover their ears

    As they stand guardian

    Over bonfires

    Listening to the twigs crackle

    Whilst trying to avoid

    the swirling smoke

    from smoldering leaf piles

    which invade the nostrils

    bringing tears to the eyes

    whilst teasing the tastebuds

    with an exciting pungent odor


  • Candy6
    October 24, 2007
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    Beautiful picture. Great write.

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