why sit and cry
why wish to die
life's a lie
don't mean to pry
life is bad run away
instead of being
merry and gay
we lose our seeing
life is good
we knew we should
we wish we could
we know we would
one bad deed
a hidden seed
one less need
let anger feed
why run away
lets learn to pray
why make you pay
you wouldn't say
why punish us
why sit and fuss
why long and lust
why not trust
what are we without you
what is it we can do
you know what I write is true
why tell me to shoo
let me try
be by your side
sit and cry
no need to hide
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Sadly many of your questions may never be answered for you. Tears are okay . . . they are honest and telling. As far as the poem's form goes, it may benefit you to extend the lines a little more. It is just my opinion, but with such short and choppy lines, it make the rhyme scheme forced and simplistic. The emotions are here, but the rhyme makes the overall poem weaker.
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haha in the poem i wasnt asking the questions i meant them to be questions you ask yourself before doing that ya know to kinda maybe make ya think a bit more about the decision
and the poem is short i know but had i opened the lines more the poem would have had less feeling i feel like this is short like helping someone thats suicidal like ya gotta do it quick ya know
so the reason for such short lines was because i felt that it would further express the meaning of what my writeing was about
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