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Asia's Birthday Celebration Part 2

    After the two friends left the club, they drove in silence to Clarice’s apartment, each lost in their own thoughts. Clarice was sure that Asia was a virgin and tonight’s experience, while pleasant for her, was a surprise. Asia herself was wondering at the feelings that had been stirred up in her, the excitement she had felt from her friend’s attention. She was nervous about what the rest of the night would bring, but also looking forward to it with shaky anticipation.

    Upon arriving at the apartment, Asia arranged herself on the couch while Clarice went to make them both a drink to help Asia calm her jittery nerves. Handing Asia the drink, Clarice sat on the couch beside her and took a sip of her own drink before leaning over Asia and laying it on the end table. She then took Asia’s drink from her and placed it next to her own. Moving back across Asia, she took her in her arms and with a look of desire and uncertainly in her eye’s, she looked into Asia’s face for assurance that this was what Asia wanted.
    Uncertain herself of what it was she wanted, just wanting, Asia wrapped her arms around Clarice’s neck and drew her closer, bringing her lips up to meet Clarice’s in a longing kiss. Drowning in the kiss, hesitantly Asia thrust her body up forward so that their breasts were rubbing against one another through their clothes while they enjoyed their kiss.
    Drawing away from Asia with a sigh, Clarice reached for the phone beside their drinks and with a loving kiss to Asia’s cheek, she settled in beside her while dialing the number. “I promised you a real celebration tonight, and that is exactly what you will have.” Turning back to the phone she listened to the ringing tone before she heard the voice.
    “Hello?”
    “Bobby, I want you to come over to my place.”
    “What time do you want me there Ma’am?”
    “As soon as possible, tell Kevin that I want you tonight and to find someone to cover the door for you.”
    “Yes Ma’am, I’m on my way.”
    “Oh Bobby, another thing., stop at your apartment and dress really nice for me. I want you to put on that cute little black leather skirt with the zipper design, the tight sequined red blouse, black stockings and your highest heels. Don’t forget to make up your face just right.”
    “No Ma’am, I won’t forget a thing.”
    “You are such a good boy Bobby. I know you won’t disappoint me.” Hanging up the phone Clarice turned her attention back to Asia. “Bobby will be here shortly and then I will show you some real fun.”
    “Will Bobby really put on a skirt and dress like a girl?”
    “Oh yes he will if he knows what’s good for him. He loves that little ole spanking skirt of his.”
    “Spanking skirt?”
    “You will see what I mean when he arrives.”
    “But he’s a man, why would he love wearing skirts?”
    “Bobby is more than a man, he’s my personal sex slave and he loves it when he is so called forced to submit to feminization.”
    “Sex slave, forced to be female? I don’t understand. What are you and who is Bobby? What’s going on?” Asia nerves were jumping now and she wasn’t sure if she should stay.
    Giving a small laugh as she reached her hand out to cup one of Asia’s cloth covered breast, Clarice turned to her friend and with the other hand began to stroke her hair gently, playing the strands of hair through her fingers.
    “Oh Asia, I own sex slaves. This simply means that those whom I own are more than willing to please me and my needs. While my needs are being met, their needs also are being satisfied. I am not selfish and more than willing to give them what they want and desire as long as they please me.”
    “Most of the friends that you see me with either owns or serve, being sex slaves.” Clarice never took her eyes from her friend’s face, searching for disgust, anger and even betrayal there, what she saw was amazement and curiosity.
    “It sounds like a sick game you guys are playing.” Asia couldn’t comprehend most of what Clarice was telling her. While a part of her brain was screaming at her to leave, another part was enjoying the stroking sensation of Clarice’s hands on her, wanting to know more, in spite of herself, Asia found it all intriguing and definitely not something her parents would approve of if they had known what their daughter was discovering.
    “I can understand what you are feeling but believe me when I say I know what you are thinking. It is not just a game, it is much more than that. Bobby is bigender and so loves it when he is to wear the clothes I selected for him tonight.  He has a need deep inside of him for pageism, I fill that need, and he loves serving me as much as I love having him serve. It is only a game if you are playing it from time to time, role playing if you will, but with us it goes deeper than that, much deeper. There are emotions involved, a love for each other, I love everyone that I own and they have a love for me, it is from this love of each other that makes it possible for them to serve and for me to accept their service. To give each other what the other needs. It is also from this love the reason I want you to be here with me tonight, and hopefully just not for tonight, but for other times to. I want you to learn more about whom I am and to love me for this, to come into my life completely.”
    Still confused and unsure, Asia’s heart skipped a beat when she heard the word love. Could it be possible that there was love between her and Clarice? She knew that she was attracted to Clarice, had been from the beginning of their friendship, she had been confused by her feelings and she never dreamed anything sexual would come from it, she never even thought of it. She knew there was so much in the world that she didn’t know, but the thought of learning from Clarice and being with her was a thrilling aspect and she knew that deep in her heart that she did want to learn more from Clarice, to share in the knowledge of her friend, and the thought of learning to serve her friend didn’t sound as repulsive as she would have imagined if someone off the street had told her that one day she would be participation in the kind of activities that Clarice was now describing to her. She felt herself relaxing more under Clarice’s administration and lay back into the softness of the back of the sofa, giving herself up to her friend.
    Taking notice of Asia’s surrender,  slowly Clarice lowered her head so that she was inches away and gently took Asia’s bottom lip between her own and suck on the ripeness that was offered to her. She only drew back at the sound of the doorbell. “That should be Bobby now, he is always quick to come when called.”

    When Bobby came into the room behind Clarice, Asia’s eyes widened at the sight of him. He was dressed as ordered, tight skirt, red blouse, stockings and high heels, but what really caught Asia’s eyes was the front of the blouse. The cleavage that was popping out and over the blouse, the cleavage that wasn’t present earlier when Bobby had let them in the side door of the club that her and Clarice had attended. Granted at the time it was getting dark and Bobby had been wearing a baggy shirt and jeans, but she thought she would have noticed something like that even under the loose shirt.
    “Shut your mouth least something goes in there, unless that is what you’re waiting for.” Clarice laughed at her as she took Bobby by his hand and pulled him over to Asia. “Bobby, you remember Asia?” at Bobby’s nod, Clarice continued the introduction. “Asia this is Bobby. You do remember him from tonight don’t you?”
    Quickly composing herself, Asia closed her mouth and nodded while trying not to stare at his breast. This was not an easy thing to do considering their size, they were larger than her own.
    “Bobby tonight Asia will be joining us, that is if she can take her eyes off your boobs. Considering this is her birthday though, why don’t you take off your blouse for her so that she may see them.”
    “Yes Ma’am.”
    Bobby reached up and slowly began to unfasten his blouse. Asia watched as each button came undone. When he had reached the last button, the blouse gapped opened, barely covering him self as he tugged the end of the shirt out of his skirt. With an exotic dancer moves, he slowly removed his blouse, exposing his firm, full breasts to their eyes, the pink nipples standing with erectness from the cool air that was caressing them.
    “Show Asia how much you love them Bobby.”
    At Clarice’s command, Bobby reached up with both hands and began to stroke his nipples, cupping the breasts in one hand, while running his soft hands over the tenderness. Lowering his head, he took a nipple in his mouth and began to suck upon it as a newborn just finding its first teat.
    “What do you think Asia?”
    “Are they real?” Asia was still staring as he replaced the nipple with his other one.
    Laughing at her friend’s question, Clarice turned to Bobby, reaching up and playing with the abandoned nipple with her fingers, twisting and pinching them. “Bobby are they real?”
    Bobby dropped the nipple from his mouth and with a slight grin answered, “As real as any money can buy.” Looking at Clarice for permission first, he asked Asia if she would like to feel them.
    With a slight hesitation, Asia got up from the couch she was sitting on and went over to Bobby. Shyly she reached out and lay a hand on one of the breast. “But how? I mean I don’t understand. You didn’t have these earlier.”
    Before answering her friend, Clarice leaned down and gave a gentle bite to the nipple she was playing with, causing Bobby to let out a little squeal. “Well I’m not an expert but I believe that the medical term would be that hypermastia.”
    “Hyperwhatita?”
    “Boob job Hun, and earlier he had them taped up in his shirt. But enough of this standing around, we have a birthday to celebrate, a birthday spanking to be given.” Grabbing onto one of Bobby’s nipples, Clarice started leading the way to the bedroom with Asia trailing slowly behind them.

    In the bedroom Clarice had Bobby lean over the bed while she took Asia into her arms for a long embrace. Pushing Asia’s hair behind her ears, Clarice began kissing her friend while running her hands up and down Asia’s back, sending small waves of shivers through her friend’s body. Asia found herself responding to her friend and delighted in the taste of the tongue that was exploring her own mouth. Drawing back slightly, Clarice began to lift Asia’s top and together with fingers trembling with anticipation Asia began to undress under Clarice’s watchful eyes.
    “This night is for you.” Clarice whispered in her ear as she fondled the soft skin underneath her fingertips. “A night for sharing, growing and learning, a night for pleasure, passion and even a bit of pain. Tonight you will become mine if that is what you wish, and you will forever be a part of our family. Bobby will be your brother and I will be proud to have you as my slave.” Turning away from her, Clarice walked over to her dresser and while opening a drawer she looked over her shoulder to Asia, “Why don’t you join your new brother there on the bed. I have a gift for you?”
    Clarice watched as Asia did as she was told. Smiling with approval at the girl’s eagerness, Clarice reached into the drawer she had opened and withdrew several items. Returning to the bed she stood behind the two folded bodies and reached down with a loving hand and stroked Asia’s ass cheek. Placing the items on the bed away from the two slaves eyes, Clarice gave Asia’s ass a quick smack. She watched with approval as Asia jumped but quickly rearranged herself without a word. She knew she had chosen wisely when she befriended the girl at school.
    Moving over to Bobby, Clarice reached down and ran her hand across Bobby’s leather skirt clad ass. Not taking her eyes from what she was doing, Clarice addressed Asia, “Asia get up, I think that is only fitting that you give out the birthday spanking before receiving yours.”
    Quietly Asia rose from the bed and went to Clarice’s side. Her eyes watched as Clarice reached for one of the zippers that ran rampant as part of the design of the skirt, and pulled it down its teeth, revealing the white ass that was underneath. Clarice unzipped the zipper so that a large round patch was easily removed away from the rest of the skirt. Handing Asia the paddle she had brought from her drawer, she stood back.
    Unsure of what was expected from her, Asia held the paddle for a second before glancing at her new Mistress. Noticing the look of approval, Asia turned back to Bobby and slowly held the paddle up in the air before bringing it down on his backside. The paddle barely made a sound as it landed on the pale flesh, bringing hardly any sensation with it.
    “Asia I can guarantee that Bobby will bring more to it than that when he gives you your spanking. You can do better than that now can’t you?” Clarice asked.
    Not really wanting to hurt the still body in front of her, Asia tried again, this time adding a bit more strength to her swing. This time when the paddle landed, there was more of a sound but not much else. The skin remained as pale as before.
    Clarice moved to Asia and took the paddle from her. “You need to be more forceful with that otherwise you aren’t really bringing him much pleasure.” And to demonstrate her words, Clarice lifted the paddle up high and brought it down with such quickness and force that Bobby’s flesh sunk in with the strike while his body sunk in the mattress. Bobby let out a low moan with the contact. His ass began to turn a bright red as Clarice continued her assault with the paddle. Finally she turned the paddle over to Asia and stepped back once again. Not wanting to disappoint her friend and seeing how Bobby seemed to enjoy it, at least she thought his moans were of pleasure, Asia lifted the paddle and began to strike him with all the strength she had.
    After several moments have passed and when Asia thought she could continue no longer, Clarice stepped in and stopped her. Taking the paddle away, she grinned at Asia and informed her that now it was her turn for her birthday spanking and she was going to add a little spice in it for her. Clarice told Bobby to stand while she had Asia get back into her original position on the bed.
    Once Asia was back in position, Clarice handed Bobby the paddle but before he could begin his turn, Clarice picked something up off the bed. Kneeling between Asia’s legs, Clarice reached between the opened legs and began to stroke Asia’s lips. Instantly Asia could feel her body responding to the fingers and the wetness forming between them. Easily slipping the thai beads into the moistness, Clarice let Asia’s own juices wet them for her. Sliding the beads out, she then slowly began to insert them into Asia’s tight ass hole. Feeling her body being invaded, Asia tried to tighten up the entrance that was being violated, but trying to calm her, Clarice began to soothe her in a soft voice, pushing one bead in at a time, helping her body to accept the beads, to relax under her administration. Almost without even realizing what she was doing, Asia was becoming calm and accepting, no longer fighting her own emotions as she submitted her body over to Clarice.
    Once the beads were in place, Clarice stood up and again moved back so that she could enjoy the sight of one slave giving pain to another. She watched intensely as Bobby took his position behind Asia and began to work the paddle over the quivering ass, at first turning the whiteness pink and then red as the paddle danced upon the bare skin. Clarice was proud of Asia and the way she was willing to learn and to please. When the paddle began its dance, Asia at first whimpered with the new pain, and slowly began to moan. Yet when Clarice stopped Bobby from his assault, Asia motioned her head that she was all right and didn’t want to leave when asked.

    When Asia’s ass was a bright red, Clarice motioned for Bobby to stop with the paddle and then had him kneel on the floor. Going back to the dresser, Clarice selected a small jar of cream and brought it to Bobby. Handing him the cream, she instructed him to apply it to Asia’s ass. As he scooted closer to her, Clarice left the room.
    Opening the jar, Bobby found pleasure in the soft aroma of roses that was released as he scooped some of the cream up with his fingers. Slowly and delicately he smoothed the cream over Asia’s ass, feeling the heat through his fingertips from her skin. Moving his fingers in small circular motions, he felt himself responding to her skin. Moving his fingers lower, he began to massage the folds of her velvety skin, her wetness mixing in with the cream. Daring to be bold and not wanting to deny himself any longer the taste of the delicate beauty that was squirming under his caressing touch; he lowered his head and quickly placed his tongue at her warm entrance. He could taste her excitement, her need to be consumed. . Licking at her entrance and penetrating her with his tongue, Bobby felt his own desire, a fire burning within rise. Neither of them heard Clarice as she reentered the room.
    Without a word Clarice stood at the doorway watching her two slaves. Normally the sight of one of her own going beyond what he or she was told to do would bring down punishment, but tonight Clarice didn’t say a word, tonight was Asia’s birthday after all and she was new, she would let Bobby’s transgressions pass this time, but only this time and she would make that clear to him later on.
    Walking in the room, Clarice let her presence be known and she smiled with amusement as Bobby almost fell over on his face in his rush to scramble away from Asia. Moving to the bed Clarice sat down beside Asia’s silent form. “Asia I want you to go and kneel beside your brother like a good girl.”
    Quietly Asia moved from the bed and taking in the correct manner of kneeling, she was soon on her knees, looking up expectantly at Clarice, curious about the bowl that Clarice held in her hands.
    “Asia I’m sorry that I don’t have a birthday cake and ice cream for this occasion, but I did find something else to replace it. I hope you enjoy it as much as Bobby will.” With those words, Clarice placed the bowl down in front of Asia.
    Asia looked down into the bowl of crushed ice not sure what it was for. The confusion clearly expressed in her eyes as she thanked Clarice for the unusual gift.
    Laughing at her look, Clarice placed a hand under Asia’s chin and tilted her head up so that she could see her face more clearly. “I thought we could celebrate winter here as well as your birthday. Bobby enjoys a good snowblowing every now and then and since ice is part of the word ice cream, I figured half is better than none.” Smiling down into Asia’s lovely face, Clarice continued, “It is time that you get to taste a real cock. All you have to do is put some ice in your mouth and then enjoy what Bobby has there to give you.” Letting go of Asia’s chin Clarice turned to Bobby. “Bobby lay back for her.”
    Scooping a small handful of the ice into her mouth, Asia turned around to face Bobby’s laying form. Leaning over to him, she shyly took his manhood into her hands, staring at the thickness, the smoothness of the skin, before cautiously lowering her mouth over him. She could see the quick intake of breath he took when he felt her cold hands moving over him. With Clarice encouraging her on, instructing her on what to do, Asia finally placed her lips over his head. As Bobby sucked in his breath, Asia being curious as to what he would taste like, feel like in her mouth, was carefully inserting his member without letting any of the ice falling out. With his moans encouraging her on, she slowly took as much of him as she could in her full mouth. Her mouth was cold now and she could hardly feel him, but the excitement of knowing that he was there was bringing her a thrill that she had never known before. Trying to suck him, she could no longer hold all the ice inside her mouth and felt some fall out along with the water from the ice that was melting. Horrified and yet memorized by her drool, she found she could not close her eyes as she continued sucking on him, taking in more of his hard cock as her mouth emptied. Soon she had him in to the hilt and Bobby was raising his hips to thrust as deep as he could. Using one hand to steady herself on Bobby’s body, her other hand began roaming as if it had a mind of her own and Asia found herself fascinated by his heavy sacs, gently teasing her fingers across his taut skin. Letting her curiosity take over her, she soon left his cock and was licking his balls, enchanted by the ridges that his skin formed across them. She had never been this close to a man before and the images of what he could do to her with his manhood sent shivers through her body as she continued licking and tasting him.

    Clapping her hands together to attract her slave’s attention, Clarice stood over them. “Ok guys, there’s still plenty more to do tonight. Asia it’s time for your real treat to begin. Go lie on the bed and open your legs.”
    Asia did as she was told.
    “Bobby take your clothes off join her. Tonight I want you to really eat her out. Let her feel the joys of your tongue.”
    Clarice sat on the edge of the bed beside Asia and as she watched Bobby undressing, she idly fondled one of Asia’s breasts, rolling the nipple between her fingers. It wasn’t long before Bobby had joined them on the bed and was kneeling between Asia’s legs. Clarice watched Asia’s face as Bobby took her clit in between his teeth and gently began nipping on it. She rose from the bed and started undressing when Asia began to moan from the tongue lashing that Bobby was bestowing upon her wet entrance. As Bobby was fucking Asia with his tongue, neither of them noticed that Clarice was again at her dresser. Bobby felt her presence when she came back and stood behind him, telling him to move off the bed but to instead prepare to mount Asia from the side of the bed. Clarice then instructed Asia to scoot down to the side of the bed and to offer Bobby her legs. Asia did as she was told, becoming nervous at the though of Bobby actually taking her with his cock.
    With Clarice’s instructions and permission, Bobby leaned over Asia and pulled her legs over his shoulders. He positioned himself before her entrance and with care he slowly inserted his steel hard cock into her opening, using caution knowing that she was a virgin, he paused once his head was inside her, giving her a chance to get used to his girth before inching more into her trembling body. Once he came to the barrier, Bobby stopped for a second and while Asia was adjusting to him, Bobby leaned over her and placed his lips over her mouth to catch any screams she might let out as he pushed past the place that has been untouched before.
    Asia felt herself tearing under his pressure and the pain engulfed her as her silent scream reverberated through her body. She felt Bobby’s pause and as he slowly began his thrusting, the pain was soon replaced by pleasure, and she found herself once again responding to his movements.
    Still leaning over her, taking her, Bobby paused once again when he felt Clarice’s hands upon his ass, spreading his cheeks. He resumed his rhythm as he felt the oil that Clarice was dribbling on him run down his crack. Moaning with each thrust he gave inside Asia, Bobby knew what was going to happen and the knowledge of this gave his thrust that much more strength. Soon he was banging into Asia’s pussy with all his might. When he felt Clarice placing the dildo inside his ass, it seemed to energize Bobby on with a more fevered pitch. Soon he was being fucked in his ass while he was fucking Asia.
    Feeling the strength of Bobby’s thrusts, Asia clutched the bed sheets in her fists as she felt herself rising with the waves that were consuming her body. She was giving in to the fire that was burning inside her, thrashing her head from side to side, wanting more of Bobby, and not wanting him to stop. Riding him to the threshold of pleasure, Asia found herself begging him for what she did not know, she only knew that this was the first time she had felt this way and that he was the reason for this strong feelings. Finally, giving in to the waves that were pulsating through her body, Asia let out a scream as she felt her juices flowing from her body, not being aware of anything or anyone at the moment, only aware of her own body and its release.
    Chuckling at her friends released, Clarice started ramming the dildo harder into Bobby’s ass, knowing that he was ready to burst at the seams and finally giving her consent to him joining Asia in her newly found sexual released.
    With the dildo now buried to the hilt in his ass, Bobby gave one final hard thrust before cumming deep in the pussy that his cock was buried in. He pushed his cock in as far as he could, filling Asia with his juices, riding the same waves that was overtaking her.
    Clarice pulled the dildo out from Bobby’s ass and gave them a few moments to regain their bearings before informing them that it was now time for Asia to learn to pleasure her. She grinned down at Asia and at the eagerness to please that she saw on Asia’s face. Even at this late hour, Clarice knew that the night was only beginning and that there was more to the birthday celebration to come before the sun would make its early rise in the morning's sky. More celebrating and more training.







Author notes

this is an entry for the erotic challenge http://allpoetry.com/column/show/2338564
and the challenge was to use words from a word bank in a story or poem. my words and the difinations of the words are:
snowblow...performing oral sex on a man with ice cubes in your mouth.

bigendered....a person who switches between a masculine and feminine genders

hypermastia...a condition where a person develops unusually large breasts

pageism....a male submitting to a female

spanking skirt...a skirt or dress with cut outs designed to allow bare-skinned spanking

thai beads....anal beads

feminization...the practice, especially in female dominance, of switching the gender role of a male submissive. It is also known as sissification.

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  • mcfreeman
    January 26, 2008
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    One of the Best

    stories I've read....

  • night4owl
    January 24, 2008

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    Wow!

    The story is great although the g/g thing doesn't light my fire. The overall effect is stunning. I went to school with the dialogue! Very well done. The are some correctly spelled wrong words here and there. I'm trying to figure out why Bobby would take a plug up his butt but then I'm not Bobby.


    • shimmer
      January 24, 2008
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      its all part of the story Owl, and bobby didnt mind the dildo or at least i doubt if he did.


  • Arkbear gold member
    October 26, 2007

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    Wow.....

    ....can we get back to Bobby with the dildo up his ass?

     

    hehe ~

     

    Liked this a lot ~

     

    Bear ~


    • shimmer
      October 27, 2007
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      lol i will keep Bobby and dildo in mind for future use for you. thanks for commenting.


  • luckynsincere
    October 26, 2007

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    Shimmer,

    This is a GREAT piece of work here. My only critique is that there is too much talking going on in your story. A poetic story, in my opinion has much more effect on the reader when it is expressed, rather than speaking. This is merely an opinion I found it a bit distracting with so much conversation. I feel that metaphors... or other poetic devices would have been more effective.

    Other than that... PERFECT!


    your score from me is 97.

    WELL DONE!

    Mel

    • shimmer
      October 27, 2007
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      thank you for the comment and being honest here with me. i am used to writing in story form and with conversations, very seldom have i tried to write in poetic form, just not good at it and even worse when it comes to using metaphors.
      thank you for the high score and i think i may challenge myself soon to write a short story in poetic form, just to see if i can do it, so thank you for the challenge for myself


  • Desire gold member
    October 24, 2007

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    Holy Moly!!

    Gosh~ when I read this...I must have been so hypnotized I forgot to leave a comment

    Wonderful write You have penned and there are a few who can write in story format, do it so well

    I'm still learning how to write in this style
    but will just have to ingest Your words
    and take it from there

    Boy did Bobby get it both ways

    Wowzers~ what a word bank You got too
    Thank You for sharing Your Talent!
    Loved it!
    Best wishes to You in the challenge Sweet One
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~

    • shimmer
      October 27, 2007

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      lol thank you for the comment. have to say this word bank was different and yet fun. these challenges can be a blast.


  • tanzanite
    October 23, 2007

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    Wonderful story hun. I loved the gentle introduction and the images I saw and felt. Well done on an excellent story.


    • shimmer
      October 27, 2007
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      thank you for taking the time to read and leave the kind words here.


  • Master Ktulu silver member
    October 22, 2007

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    Loooved it!

    Exceptionally well done. Hmmmmm...will there be a part three to this great story? It does seem as though Asia needs a turn at Bobby..

    **Master Ktulu**

    • shimmer
      October 22, 2007
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      lol may make a part three if one of the challenges calls for Asia Does Bobby. thank you for the kind words Master Ktulu, you do know how to challenge us on here and make us learn and grow with each one you post.


  • Tattboyspet
    October 22, 2007

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    "at least she thought his moans were of pleasured," pleasured - seems the use of that word dictates that it should be pleasure ... ?


    • shimmer
      October 22, 2007
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      thank you for catching that, it's changed now.

  • mcfreeman
    October 21, 2007
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    Gawd Girl Great read

    wonderful write...loved it.


  • Riftkin gold member
    October 21, 2007

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    OH my this is pure pleasure to read, for you held my attention girl from the beginning lines to the very end and I enjoyed it all.
    Thank you for this read.

    Karina (Riftkin)

    • shimmer
      October 22, 2007
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      lol thank you for the kind words. the words in this challenge was out there but seems as if everyone pulled through.

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