dancing freely
upon the ripples of
crystal blue water
softness of the wind
strokes bare flesh
like a gentle caress
moonlight
incandesence
glistening off us
sea of stars
shining against
the velvet sky
tonight we share
our love affair
by diving into
...the intimacy of the sea
A contest entry
- Delightful Mood Swings Picture Prompt Contest by delightfulmess.
2100 points, ended October 21, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Very simple poem with simple ideas carried by deep meaningful metaphors. Sometimes a poem can rest forever upon just a simple thought.
Nicely written!
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cool
good stuff -
Lovely view of the sea and
what intimacies it brings
into lovers eyes. Great
metaphors as well ~ Mykey
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Wonderful
Very sensual and passionate. Truly captures the picture so well. Intimacy as one should know.
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i really really like this, but the last line almost feels too explanatory. I'd cut it at diving in
Just a thought, though.
Warm imagery, makes me want to go swimming.
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Oh this was stunning.
Love this take on that
pic... Thank you so much for entering the contest
delila
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great poetry
The rhyme and flow are beautiful as is the story - lovely - you pen a pretty nice moving picture here - keep on keeping on - Bless God - Joe
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Quite Lovly
Well this certainly made the picture come alive and so much more. I admire your talent with this beautiful depth and flow through out it. I also admire how you deiced to write this piece with so few of words and crystal clearing wording at that. any ways all round an awesome poem and a very enjoyable one at that. keep up the good work as always and Good Luck in the contest. 
Signed, Paul
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You have such an "easy" way with words, so gentle and tender and yet very meaningful. Brings a smile to my face and warmth to my heart. Thank you for sharing your words with me and best wishes to you in the contest. Keep that quill dipped in ink and ever ready for use.
♥ Touchof1der
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Simply beautiful my friend! I love the setting and picture that you used for this poem. Such a sweet and tranquil piece you have written. Well done and good luck to you in the contest! Keep up the wonderful work here!
Jeremy0826
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